Sports stars and movie stars have an obligation to behave as role models for the young people who look up to them. In return for the millions of dollars that they are paid, we should expect them to fulfill this societal responsibility.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
According to the recent study of Forbes:"Atheles and Hollywood stars are among the richest people on Earth, Superstars like Leo Messi can earn upto 100 Million USD a year", the reason behind this massive fan following and huge commercialisation of the industry. People almost religiously follow whatever these stars do. Therefore, I somewhat belive that when a get so much from the society and people. in return it is his moral responsibilty to give something back for the betterment of it. This can be easily understood using few example and cases.
To begin, If you ask a child in primary school:"what you wnat to do when you grow older ?", most of them will either name a famous celebrity or a champion athele. This show the level of influence these people have on our young mind. This influnce has grown stonger and wider with widespread introduction of Internet, mobile phone and Televison in 21st century. Everything from a college's sport event to a movie premier from everywhere in the world is now telecasted live. When people get such an easy access to stars, people start following them diligently. What happens next is natural, with such fan base, company like Nike, Cocacola see an opportunity to capitalize this phenomenon. Starts are paid huge sum of money to endorse product and appear in a public event. Sometime, these product can be damamging for certain section of the society. For example, Coca cola became the main sponser of London olympics, many athele did paid advertisment for it, kids who follow these starts, unknowkingly though that is it good for health, and in return coca cola sales sky rocketed in 2012. So this is wrong, the advertisment set a wrong example for kids.
Also, With to so called paparazi culture, what has become common now is the level of attention the personal life of celbrities get in mainstream media. SO if a star do something bad for example consuming drugs or doing a small crime, his fan think this is okay. People and media inherently glorify this act. The distinction between private and public life has become blurr now. so, before doing anything, the star must consider the consequeces of his action and its impact.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: In
...et so much from the society and people. in return it is his moral responsibilty to...
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun example seems to be countable; consider using: 'few examples'.
Suggestion: few examples
...it. This can be easily understood using few example and cases. To begin, If you ask a c...
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Message: Use simply 'celebrity'.
Suggestion: celebrity
...', most of them will either name a famous celebrity or a champion athele. This show the lev...
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Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'easy access'.
Suggestion: easy access
...w telecasted live. When people get such an easy access to stars, people start following them d...
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Message: Did you mean 'this product' or 'these products'?
Suggestion: this product; these products
...and appear in a public event. Sometime, these product can be damamging for certain section of...
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Message: The verb 'did' requires the base form of the verb: 'pay'
Suggestion: pay
...ser of London olympics, many athele did paid advertisment for it, kids who follow th...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...common now is the level of attention the personal life of celbrities get in mains...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: So
...e and public life has become blurr now. so, before doing anything, the star must c...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, so, therefore, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.5258426966 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.4196629213 40% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.3162921348 53% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 29.0 33.0505617978 88% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 58.6224719101 73% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 12.9106741573 70% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1831.0 2235.4752809 82% => OK
No of words: 371.0 442.535393258 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.93530997305 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38877662729 4.55969084622 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80509734911 2.79657885939 100% => OK
Unique words: 229.0 215.323595506 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.617250673854 0.4932671777 125% => OK
syllable_count: 576.0 704.065955056 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 58.2201640327 60.3974514979 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.55 118.986275619 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.55 23.4991977007 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.8 5.21951772744 34% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.97078651685 60% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 8.0 7.80617977528 102% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.83258426966 186% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.207413786679 0.243740707755 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0560037763705 0.0831039109588 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0383231818395 0.0758088955206 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.130002357872 0.150359130593 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0448906209781 0.0667264976115 67% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 14.1392134831 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.8420337079 109% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.37 12.1639044944 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.79 8.38706741573 105% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 100.480337079 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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