Sports stars and movie stars have an obligation to behave as role models for the young people who look up to them. In return for the millions of dollars that they are paid, we should expect them to fulfill this societal responsibility.
Young people always follow sports stars and movie stars as they pass their leisure time watching movies,sports. They see them as a role model for their life.The above prompt also states the fact.As they are role model for young people,it is social their responsibility to behave as a good role model.Thus, I fully agree with the above prompt for the following reasons that justifies my position.
Firstly, sports and movie stars promote good social behaviour. If they follow social norm and culture, the follower will also try to be like them. For example, Sakib Al Hasan is one of the best alrounder of the world cricket. He is very humble and hardworking person, engages himself in social work. The followers try to be like him. In this way, he is promoting social norms and culture, inspring young people to become a good citizen. Also movie stars like Amir Khan always does some inspiring movies. In his movies, he try to deliver a good social message. In one of his movie named "Tare Zameen Par", he inspired parents to be more helpful and caring to the students. He showed how to be a good parents. In that time, young people highly appreciated the movie for the good and inspirational message of the movie. In this way, sports and movie stars can highly motivate the young people of our generation.
Secondly, if sports and movie stars promote wrong behaviour like stealing,hijacking etc, then the young people may follow this. They can think that they can become succesful and gain anything by doing this. For example, sometimes sport stars engage in fixing of the match. They sell themselves in terms of money. Like we know, Md Ashraful of Bangladesgh cricket had done this and also already convicted to 5 years ban. But doing this, he sent a wrong message to the young generation. He set a bad example to the generation and they become frustrated by seeing his this type of action. So, wrongdoing of our stars can hamper our young generation.
Lastly, Stars of movie and stars should do the things that has a social message. Like, a good social message in a movie highly motivate them. They do not do a movie that promotes social wrongdoing. In this way, sports stars should behave in a good way in their sporting time.
In conclusion, Sports and movie stars need to be a social role model for the young generation. Otherwise young people will practice socially immoral things. So for the betterment they should promote this.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, lastly, may, second, secondly, so, then, thus, for example, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 19.5258426966 51% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 14.8657303371 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.3162921348 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 51.0 33.0505617978 154% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 58.6224719101 78% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 12.9106741573 54% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2035.0 2235.4752809 91% => OK
No of words: 423.0 442.535393258 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.81087470449 5.05705443957 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53508145475 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53216320772 2.79657885939 91% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 215.323595506 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.45390070922 0.4932671777 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 610.2 704.065955056 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 6.24550561798 208% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.38483146067 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.2370786517 143% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 23.0359550562 61% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 45.0527501632 60.3974514979 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 70.1724137931 118.986275619 59% => More chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 14.5862068966 23.4991977007 62% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.58620689655 5.21951772744 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 7.80617977528 115% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 20.0 10.2758426966 195% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.350373887218 0.243740707755 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.103998419027 0.0831039109588 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0791999407677 0.0758088955206 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.248631077812 0.150359130593 165% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0582663562981 0.0667264976115 87% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.5 14.1392134831 60% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 74.19 48.8420337079 152% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.4 12.1743820225 53% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 10.03 12.1639044944 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.39 8.38706741573 88% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 100.480337079 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.8971910112 76% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 11.2143820225 68% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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