Sports stars and movie stars have an obligation to behave as role models for the young people who look up to them. In return for the millions of dollars that they are paid, we should expect them to fulfill this societal responsibility.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
The prompt urges that this is the moral responsibility of a movie star or a sport star has an obligation to behave like a role model for the young people. For some obvious reasons I would like to be "mostly agree" with the statement and hereby I am obliged to provide necessary points with elaboration in defense of my position.
To begin with - to very beginning of this issue to discuss we have to be clear of the term "stars". Are all the people who works in movies or in the field of sport are regarded as stars? Probably not. In contemporary world, people tend to call "stars" those people who have achieved annex in their professional career. These people are highly celebrated for their success or for their controversies. Because of their skill or whatever one can say - charm; people desire to be like them for which they tried to follow their stars. The laymen want to be like them. For example - if a hollywood star maintains a certain trait in his or her daily life, it seems pretty obvious that the same trite are being practiced among their followers too, such as - having a peculier hair cutting, trying to build a solid body and so on. So, this fact is very common in more or less every aspects of fields. And because these people are celebrated whole-heartedly among the simple mass, that is why it becomes their societal responsibility to give proper care to their customs as well as their correspondances.
That the term said in the prompt that - the stars have kind of "obligation" is not much complied withe the fact that - people are freeliving beings. It might be sensed that the stars are also freewheeling people and that is why they have their own style of living and also they are not bound to maintain the "obligation"; mentioned in the prompt. Yes, that is also can not neglected. But what is more important, the second sentence - their "societal" responsibility, is a fact that can not be denied. It is evident from our daily lives that when a person becomes famous wihtin the public domain, people tend to immitate them. Because oif their fandom their opinions, point of views, attributes and regular trites, even in least to be counted, become much more amplified among their fans; by whom they are cherished. For instance - if a star sahres his or her opinion on a hot topic and because of his or her being a star - that opinion will be prolifered from dailies to social medias. Consequently it is much more likely to be ahppened that more and more people will try to have the similar opinion or in other ways they will criticize that. Meaning that - their opinion and views do actually leave significant effect on the abstracts of their followers.
Another important fact is that - those who are young are pretty much in their hysteria. Because of their younger age and hot blooded demeaner - they tend to act readily than other matured persons. What happens is that if a celebraty follows "not so much smart" demure or opines incentives; not so mcuh beneficial to the society or for the young ones - the youngers try to maintain those trites also in their lives irrespective of the necessasity of those. It happens sometimes that - the objured younger ones do not pay heed to their parents rather remain more headious towards the starts they loved to follow.
So, looking at all the reasoning and crticial remarks mentioned above - it might not be a bad idea to conclude that, although it is not the prime responsibility of the stars to
maintain but proper demeaner but a more societal one.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: canned
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Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'neglect'
Suggestion: neglect
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Suggestion: Consequently,
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Message: The adverb 'sometimes' is usually put before the verb 'happens'.
Suggestion: sometimes happens
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Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, consequently, if, look, second, so, well, for example, for instance, kind of, such as, as well as, more or less, to begin with, what is more
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 36.0 19.5258426966 184% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 25.0 14.8657303371 168% => OK
Relative clauses : 25.0 11.3162921348 221% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 77.0 33.0505617978 233% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 74.0 58.6224719101 126% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 12.9106741573 46% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2977.0 2235.4752809 133% => OK
No of words: 618.0 442.535393258 140% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.81715210356 5.05705443957 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.98594081286 4.55969084622 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92911529961 2.79657885939 105% => OK
Unique words: 297.0 215.323595506 138% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.480582524272 0.4932671777 97% => OK
syllable_count: 926.1 704.065955056 132% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 6.24550561798 160% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.2370786517 124% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 23.0359550562 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.8829168534 60.3974514979 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.08 118.986275619 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.72 23.4991977007 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.44 5.21951772744 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.97078651685 121% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 10.2758426966 156% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.83258426966 166% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.241426463957 0.243740707755 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0784346224724 0.0831039109588 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0844036956224 0.0758088955206 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.134315537823 0.150359130593 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0865066296992 0.0667264976115 130% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 14.1392134831 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 48.8420337079 114% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 12.1639044944 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.12 8.38706741573 97% => OK
difficult_words: 129.0 100.480337079 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.8971910112 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.2143820225 103% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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