Sports stars and movie stars have an obligation to behave as role models for the young people who look up to them. In return for the millions of dollars that they are paid, we should expect them to fulfill this societal responsibility.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
Television and social media have played a vital role in the rising popularity of many new stars. Be it in the field of sports, movies or social media influencers, these stars are closely followed by their fans. The stars give frequent interviews, they constantly upload new stories or posts in which they sometimes discuss about their personal lives or how their journey so far has been. These stars have countless followers on social media platforms and they make sure they continuously engage with them. The stars also feature in advertisements for commercial products, some campaigns, etc, which influence their followers to buy these products or be a part of the campaign. The stars earn a lot of money with these advertisements and campaign promotions.
Along with a lot of good things we also get to hear about controversies. Just as the good news about the celebrities are spread quickly, so are the bad news too. This has an impact on the influence the star has on his/her followers and in turn has some effects on his/her professional life as well. Many teams, movie houses have rescinded their contracts with the players/movie stars after a controversy has been reported. Thus what these stars do and what they represent affects a lot of people and the stars earn a lot of money through it, be it any form of advertising or a campaign. Some people believe that since these stars are paid such huge sums, they must be obliged to act as role models for young people who follow them. I do not completely agree with this view for several reasons.
Firstly, the advertisements these stars do, the sports they play, or the movies they act in is just work for them. We may view them as being something extra-ordinary from the rest of us because they operate on such a huge platform, but for them it might just be normal work. Sometimes the stars participate in campaigns because they really believe in a cause and not because they just want to influence people. They score a century, or they deliver a blockbuster film which maybe viewed from outside as a great achievement, but for them it just might be a mundane task they are supposed to deliver.
These stars might want to keep their professional and personal life separate. They might not want to talk about their journey or why they do what they do. It is completely fine if they do not want to open up or share or influence people. The huge amount of sums we pay them is for the work they do, it does not in anyway put an obligation on them to do what we expect them to do. We need to look at it from a professional point of view and let the star decide whether or not he wants to act as a role model and influence people. We must respect the decision he/she takes.
Thus, while it is true that we pay these stars huge amount of money and they have such wide spread popularity we cannot expect them to act as role models and influence people. This must be a choice that they have and they should have the say about what they want to promote, how they want to influence people.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 424, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
... after a controversy has been reported. Thus what these stars do and what they repre...
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Line 7, column 312, Rule ID: IN_ANYWAY[1]
Message: Did you mean 'in any way'?
Suggestion: in any way
...em is for the work they do, it does not in anyway put an obligation on them to do what we...
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Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
...l point of view and let the star decide whether or not he wants to act as a role model and inf...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, anyway, but, first, firstly, if, look, may, really, so, thus, well, while, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.5258426966 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 26.0 14.8657303371 175% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 82.0 33.0505617978 248% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 62.0 58.6224719101 106% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 12.9106741573 70% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2499.0 2235.4752809 112% => OK
No of words: 550.0 442.535393258 124% => OK
Chars per words: 4.54363636364 5.05705443957 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.84273464058 4.55969084622 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51951786021 2.79657885939 90% => OK
Unique words: 231.0 215.323595506 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.42 0.4932671777 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 756.9 704.065955056 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 6.24550561798 240% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.2370786517 124% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.6834675904 60.3974514979 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.96 118.986275619 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0 23.4991977007 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.64 5.21951772744 70% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.2758426966 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.328393453945 0.243740707755 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.104447539992 0.0831039109588 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0732874954572 0.0758088955206 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.210704697427 0.150359130593 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0349205016027 0.0667264976115 52% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 14.1392134831 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 48.8420337079 135% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.1743820225 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.05 12.1639044944 74% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.94 8.38706741573 83% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 100.480337079 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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