Sports stars and movie stars have an obligation to behave as role models for the young people who look up to them. In return for the millions of dollars that they are paid, we should expect them to fulfill this societal responsibility.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
While growing up, most of us have had role models, from either film industry or the sports industry. From historic times this has been the trennd of the society and people are greaty influeneced by what the elite of these industries do. Young people often follow on these trend wagons and blindly hound what the limelight does. This fact is well know to the industries, Hence it is expected of these professionals to fulfill their societal impact and influence their following to a positive vibe and good qualities. I agree with the prompt and the following points with help show my position on my stand.
All of us have role models when we are young, and most of the times these are our favourite players or actors in our loved movies. Young people people as descends of apes are inclined to mimic what their model does. So, it is important for this person of influence to think twice before what he does infront of the camera and on social media. As most of his fanatical followers try to mimic what he does without thinking about the consequences. For instance, IF celebs and stars with great social media impact, upload bawdy material or support objectionable or violent content their youth following will also gain an inclination towards it and may lead to a pschyological defect in their behaviors. Imagine a celebrity prompting or sharing a violent resolve to a petty crime on his social handles, millions of people will see it and be influenced to become violent on petty matters.
Sometimes, professionals of various indsutries who are role models of youth population, quote or preach things which are not attainable by everyone, but they put it in a way that everyone can achieve it. For instance, a celebrity can preach that becoming a star is easy, while it may be easy for him but that may not be the same for all his followers who want to be just like them. The celeb may be an natural actor so the career came easy to him, but this is not the case of everyone. After, listening to him a lot of his young followers may think they can follow his career path, but doing so only leads to failure, leading to mental depression among the youth leading to a gloomy society. Instead, of preaching ones to follow their own dreams many celebs preach unknowingly how to become like them, some even doing it intentaionally, which harms the society in a great way and they should think twice before what they say, and what impact it can have.
The sports stars and limelight of celebrities, should think how they can promote and cultivate a positive society and do what they can to achieve this, they can use their influence to spread positivity. Consider a famous actor, who has millions of followers, we expect him to promote qualities like peace, harmony and morals like keeping streets clean. This is easy and expected of him for what he has achieved and for change he can bring by small things he can do. If he goes of a cleaniness drive a lot of his followers will follow him and do the same thing in their own citites.
So, with the following points i would like to conclude that it is imporatant and expected of celebrities and sports stars to understand that what they do has a lot soceital impact and they should try to curb the society forward with the steps they can take. They shouldn't do it because they are paid highly but becuase it is a duty expected out of them. A way in which they can repay their fans and the society for all the appreciation they receive.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 85, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'sports'' or 'sport's'?
Suggestion: sports'; sport's
...odels, from either film industry or the sports industry. From historic times this has ...
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Line 1, column 347, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'known'.
Suggestion: known
...t the limelight does. This fact is well know to the industries, Hence it is expected...
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Line 3, column 138, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: people
...rs or actors in our loved movies. Young people people as descends of apes are inclined to mim...
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Line 3, column 344, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ront of the camera and on social media. As most of his fanatical followers try to ...
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Line 5, column 48, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a are'.
Suggestion: who is a are
...es, professionals of various indsutries who are role models of youth population, quote ...
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Line 5, column 400, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
... to be just like them. The celeb may be an natural actor so the career came easy t...
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Message: Consider replacing "in a great way" with adverb for "great"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...intentaionally, which harms the society in a great way and they should think twice before what...
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Line 9, column 31, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...tites. So, with the following points i would like to conclude that it is impor...
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Line 9, column 264, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: shouldn't
...ward with the steps they can take. They shouldnt do it because they are paid highly but ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, may, so, well, while, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.5258426966 108% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 23.0 12.4196629213 185% => OK
Conjunction : 34.0 14.8657303371 229% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 81.0 33.0505617978 245% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 78.0 58.6224719101 133% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 12.9106741573 70% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2866.0 2235.4752809 128% => OK
No of words: 625.0 442.535393258 141% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.5856 5.05705443957 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.0 4.55969084622 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48128998708 2.79657885939 89% => OK
Unique words: 276.0 215.323595506 128% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.4416 0.4932671777 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 882.9 704.065955056 125% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.77640449438 281% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.2370786517 114% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 23.0359550562 117% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.1640758606 60.3974514979 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.608695652 118.986275619 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.1739130435 23.4991977007 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.4347826087 5.21951772744 47% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 7.80617977528 115% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.230681347849 0.243740707755 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0712377033252 0.0831039109588 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0426595719758 0.0758088955206 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.138664830348 0.150359130593 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0247498037619 0.0667264976115 37% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 14.1392134831 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.99 48.8420337079 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.64 12.1639044944 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.96 8.38706741573 95% => OK
difficult_words: 118.0 100.480337079 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.8971910112 88% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 11.2143820225 114% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.7820224719 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 62.5 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.75 Out of 6
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