Fifteen years ago, Omega University implemented a new procedure that encouraged students to evaluate the teaching effectiveness of all their professors. Since that time, Omega professors have begun to assign higher grades in their classes, and overall student grade averages at Omega have risen by 30 percent. Potential employers, looking at this dramatic rise in grades, believe that grades at Omega are inflated and do not accurately reflect student achievement; as a result, Omega graduates have not been as successful at getting jobs as have graduates from nearby Alpha University. To enable its graduates to secure better jobs, Omega University should terminate student evaluation of professors.
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
In the given prompt the students of Omega university are not being employed by recruiters and the cause of this is being questioned, the university thinks that the rise in grades and less number of students being employed is caused by the student evaulation system of the professors and wants to abolish the practice. No sturdy conclusion can be drawn, whether the students will get jibs after the abolishment of the practice for the given reasons.
The high grades being achieved by the students after implementing of the practice tells us that professors have started to give hundred percent effort in teaching which has led to this thirty percent gain in avergae marks. This makes the professors accountable as follows: A professor who was topor prior to the implimentation of this system has to change himself and be more zealous about teaching the students or he will have to answer the administration why the students rated him poorly in the review session. This is why the grades have risen and as the teachers have become more careful about their actions and teaching methods.
As, the students have got higher grades because of better teaching effectiveness of the teachers they have secured better grades and employers see this as an inflation without any testing or evidence, they should conduct proper recruitment preocess to evaluate the students' potential and not judge the book by it's cover. The employement of students of Omega University is lesser compared to Alpha University, It is being assumed that Alpha and Omega universities are alike, which may give a false representation as: Alpha University may be located in a place where a lot of companies are situated nearby and employers can easily come to recruit. Whereas, Omega may be located in a rural place with very few to none places nearby where employement is required. So, sucha comparison between the two universities is impossible to make without knowing the location and other details of the universities.
Omega Univeristy feels it should terminate the student evaluatipon process as it considers it to be the reason for the students not getting 'better' jobs. This is however, not clearly visible the reasons why the students don't secure 'better jobs' is unknown, the definition of better jobs is not fixed and depends on person to person the term in itself is vague. For instance, a job which pays more but the student is not happy doing it maybe considered better by the university but not by the student, he/she may like a job where the pay is low but they enjoy doing it. So, without any clear defintion of the term 'better jobs' such an assumption to ban the ongoing practice is not wise.
The three points stated above show what evidences are required to evaulate the arguement and explain how it weakens and strengthens the prompt. The university should carefully elaborate upon thes points and then deicide whether it should stop or conitnue with the practice of professor review by the students.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 10 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 17 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 504 350
No. of Characters: 2445 1500
No. of Different Words: 239 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.738 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.851 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.633 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 180 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 133 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 86 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 49 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 33.6 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 12.945 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.467 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.348 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.614 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.147 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 129, Rule ID: NODT_DOZEN[1]
Message: Use simply: 'a hundred'.
Suggestion: a hundred
...us that professors have started to give hundred percent effort in teaching which has le...
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Line 5, column 647, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Whereas” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...d employers can easily come to recruit. Whereas, Omega may be located in a rural place ...
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Line 7, column 221, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...ly visible the reasons why the students dont secure better jobs is unknown, the def...
^^^^
Line 7, column 232, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...the reasons why the students dont secure better jobs is unknown, the definition o...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, may, so, then, whereas, as to, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 29.0 19.6327345309 148% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 11.1786427146 188% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 28.8173652695 104% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 55.5748502994 108% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 16.3942115768 98% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2491.0 2260.96107784 110% => OK
No of words: 502.0 441.139720559 114% => OK
Chars per words: 4.96215139442 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.7334296765 4.56307096286 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66770555164 2.78398813304 96% => OK
Unique words: 242.0 204.123752495 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.482071713147 0.468620217663 103% => OK
syllable_count: 780.3 705.55239521 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 33.0 22.8473053892 144% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 76.8703381604 57.8364921388 133% => OK
Chars per sentence: 166.066666667 119.503703932 139% => OK
Words per sentence: 33.4666666667 23.324526521 143% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.8 5.70786347227 67% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.266996427978 0.218282227539 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0883085623833 0.0743258471296 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0626052967839 0.0701772020484 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.140369854383 0.128457276422 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0627607431946 0.0628817314937 100% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.7 14.3799401198 130% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.98 48.3550499002 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.2 12.197005988 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.08 12.5979740519 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.8 8.32208582834 106% => OK
difficult_words: 112.0 98.500998004 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.5 12.3882235529 149% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.2 11.1389221557 136% => OK
text_standard: 19.0 11.9071856287 160% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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