The surest indicator of a great nation is represented not by the achievements of its rulers, artists, or scientists, but by the general welfare of its people.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
What defines “Nation”? It is an entity comprising of various individuals, living in harmony. This definition concludes that a country’s important concern is the plight of its compatriots. Hence, I agree with the prompt that a nation’s greateness is decided by the welfare of its residents, for three reasons, elucidated further. However, I do concede that, achievements of scientists, politicians and leaders does contribute to a country’s significance.
First and foremost, any governmental entity is elected to better the welfare of its people. Eventually, if the government has the concern for its citizens, the environment of the country will be made better. For instance, after the British left India, the succeeding government wanted to make the nation conducive for its citizens, whom had various problems like, caste-based discrimination, financial issues and huge famines causing deaths of deared ones. Thus, necessary measures were taken to eradicate such problems, by subsequent governments. Today, India is one of the top performing nations in the world, be it in the field of science, technology, or sports. All the efforts taken by the governement helped its citizens lead better lives, today, thus the present-day welfare of people of India, prove that a country’s greatness can be assessed by the lifestyle of its citizens.
In contrast, the achievements by scholars, leaders and scientists, are in no way lesser than the nation’s welfare, acting as a good indicator of a country’s greatness. Countries today, are identified by their advancements in various sectors. For example, despite many controversies surrounding China, it is still exalted as pioneers in science and technology. Most of the electronic gadgets are assembled in China for better prices and good quality. This paved way for top companies to invest in China. Such technological advancements does prove the country’s standing.
Finally, both the achievements of the country’s personalites as well as the plights of its citizens, act as an indicator of the country’s efficiency. Achievements of poets and writers, prove the nation’s literary capabilities, scientists emphasize its technological advancements and eminent leaders guarantees the country’s social order. On the other hand, welfare of the people is maintained only when government takes good care of its people, by providing better infrastructure and facilities. Thus, being a good indicator of a nation’s capability, as well.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'comprising' or 'consisting of'?
Suggestion: comprising; consisting of
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Suggestion:
...the top performing nations in the world, be it in the field of science, technolog...
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Suggestion: do
... China. Such technological advancements does prove the country’s standing. Finall...
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Suggestion: and
...ievements of the country’s personalites as well as the plights of its citizens, act as an ...
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Suggestion:
...re of the people is maintained only when government takes good care of its people...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, hence, however, if, so, still, thus, well, for example, for instance, in contrast, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.5258426966 77% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 12.4196629213 16% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 14.8657303371 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.3162921348 53% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 33.0505617978 67% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 58.6224719101 80% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 12.9106741573 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2133.0 2235.4752809 95% => OK
No of words: 378.0 442.535393258 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.64285714286 5.05705443957 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40933352052 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.32151364574 2.79657885939 119% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 215.323595506 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.55291005291 0.4932671777 112% => OK
syllable_count: 640.8 704.065955056 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 55.3387834378 60.3974514979 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.571428571 118.986275619 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0 23.4991977007 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.33333333333 5.21951772744 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.2758426966 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.182404044093 0.243740707755 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0551230597994 0.0831039109588 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0526703625997 0.0758088955206 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.123113921393 0.150359130593 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0571287653853 0.0667264976115 86% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 14.1392134831 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 48.8420337079 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.14 12.1639044944 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.75 8.38706741573 116% => OK
difficult_words: 125.0 100.480337079 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 11.8971910112 63% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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