Claim: An action is morally correct if the amount of good that results from the action is greater than the amount of bad that results from the action.
Reason: When assessing the morality of an action, the results of the action are more important than the intent of the person or people performing the action.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim AND the reason on which that claim is based.
If an action leads to any disturbance or bad outcomes, even at the minimum extent, the result, despite having postive influence, is considered morally corrupt. In addition, the purpose of any journey is to relish the process, result being secondary.Thus, I disagree to both the claim as well as the reason, for two reasons, which will be elucidated subsequently.
Firstly, the journey and the process of attaining goals, is the key aspect, not the outcome. Without the travel, the result, no matter positive or negative, is meaningless.A famous incident quoted by former Indian president, A.P.J Abdul Kalam is, when he led his first mission to send a communication satellite to the space, the program, due to capricious atmospheric conditions, failed badly. This left him (Abdul Kalam) in shatters. He had to answer the media's fierce questions and accept his failure. But, during the course of building the rocket, he came across an obstacle of reducing the satellite's weight, thus, he and his team syntheissed a new compound that weighed less and could bear huge temperatures. Few years later, during his visit to a physically challenged hospital, an euphany struck him, this led him to use the compound he and his team had found earlier as amputes. Had he not focussed on the process, a chemical substance used in a disparate field (space science), could not have been put into use in another (medical). Thus, the importance of being aware of the process is of priority than the outcome.
Second of all, analogous to what most country's justice system propagates, an innocent shall not be punished under any circumstance, even a miniute bad effect of an action should be curtailed immediately. If an action has an overall positive outcome, but few side-effects, the majority who are not affected will savour, but it will take a toll on the affected people. For example, the emergence of nuclear power plants in many countries, can serve as a huge opportunity to prosper in economy and infrastructure. The question is what is the plight of the people residing near the plant, or will the lives of people working in the plant be given assurance by the government or public? The answer is "no". Despite, such power plants aid in leading a better and a comfortable lifestyle, there are many associated perils, but, the majority are not affected, yet, we need to care and have consideration for the people that may get affected. Therefore, if an action proves to be a danger, even for a few, the overall aim is weakened.
In conclusion, I strongly disagree to the claims and reasons supported by the prompt because, the travel to complete an action is the important part, irrespective of the result and if that travel or action affects even a substantial number of people, the purpose of the action is diluted.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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... questions and accept his failure. But, during the course of building the rocket, he came across an ...
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...pound he and his team had found earlier as amputes. Had he not focussed on the pro...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, if, may, second, so, therefore, thus, well, for example, in addition, in conclusion, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.5258426966 118% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 14.8657303371 114% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.3162921348 53% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 33.0505617978 70% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 58.6224719101 90% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 12.9106741573 101% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2350.0 2235.4752809 105% => OK
No of words: 474.0 442.535393258 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.95780590717 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.66599839874 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87989752469 2.79657885939 103% => OK
Unique words: 263.0 215.323595506 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.554852320675 0.4932671777 112% => OK
syllable_count: 740.7 704.065955056 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 18.0 4.99550561798 360% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 23.0359550562 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 75.6637297521 60.3974514979 125% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.555555556 118.986275619 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.3333333333 23.4991977007 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.44444444444 5.21951772744 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 7.80617977528 77% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.2758426966 68% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.245534565501 0.243740707755 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0684829369375 0.0831039109588 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0940530029758 0.0758088955206 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.182593226434 0.150359130593 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.104945749533 0.0667264976115 157% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 14.1392134831 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 48.8420337079 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.1743820225 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 12.1639044944 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.39 8.38706741573 112% => OK
difficult_words: 134.0 100.480337079 133% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.8971910112 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.2143820225 111% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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