The surest indicator of a great nation is represented not by the achievements of its rulers, artists, or scientists, but by the general welfare of its people.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
The great nation is a belief that every person desires to be in, but rarely knows what it represents. The statement implied that the well-being of a nation’s individuals is the main indicator to declare it a great country, not the triumph of its rulers, artists, or scientists. Although the welfare of people is highly essential for a nation, in my opinion, it cannot completely signify a great nation. Therefore, I think both of the attributes are necessary for a nation to be significant and in this essay, I will discuss my standing.
To begin with, a country cannot be in suitable shape if its people are suffering from severe things. Most people are achieving something nowadays but how can we know if they are truly content in their life. For example, Japan is the most developed country but 80% of people in it are suffering from depression. They are all known for being hardworking and punctual, and also, they have great rulers and scientists. Every day they are creating the most advanced devices and the whole world is watching them. Still, they are not happy and day by day the rate of suicide is increasing. To conclude, Japan has every achievement on its feet, but the people are not well. So, these successes are futile as the nation cannot be defined as perfect and prominent if it cannot secure the healthy being of citizens, not just physical but also mental health.
Secondly, If the country has healthy citizens but is not developing, then the vision of a great nation, in reality, is not working either in this case. For instance, think about an image where all people are having all kinds of facilities, like education, and health but not the comfort amenities, like mobile phones, and the internet. They are living a hundred years ago life and they have no complaints about it. The country has general citizens but no creation or purpose, no ruler, scientists, and artists. It can look perfect picture for now, but slowly it will become dull without having creativeness and will build conflict without having a leader. If there is no ambition, innovation, or passion, then it is just a living, which is very similar to robots or animals. But humans are the best species because of their thinking ability and way of life. The rulers are helping to establish peace and discipline in their county, artists are offering serenity in people’s minds and scientists are producing unique things that make our life comfortable. So, without these characters playing their role perfectly, there cannot be a significant country as it is not developing or evolving.
To conclude, the great nation cannot construct by a single idea or component, it requires more than a hundred visions and features. In other words, only excellent leaders, artists, and scientists cannot guarantee a country’s accomplishment if its people are not leading a healthy life, as well as, only general individuals cannot offer a developed nation. Therefore, both characteristics need to play their role to build a remarkable nation.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, look, second, secondly, so, still, then, therefore, well, for example, for instance, i think, as well as, in my opinion, in other words, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 37.0 19.5258426966 189% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 33.0 14.8657303371 222% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.3162921348 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 41.0 33.0505617978 124% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 45.0 58.6224719101 77% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 12.9106741573 54% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2527.0 2235.4752809 113% => OK
No of words: 510.0 442.535393258 115% => OK
Chars per words: 4.95490196078 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.75217629947 4.55969084622 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73037297138 2.79657885939 98% => OK
Unique words: 252.0 215.323595506 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.494117647059 0.4932671777 100% => OK
syllable_count: 784.8 704.065955056 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 6.24550561798 160% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 11.0 1.77640449438 619% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.38483146067 205% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.2370786517 119% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.9799874939 60.3974514979 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.291666667 118.986275619 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.25 23.4991977007 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.875 5.21951772744 132% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 7.80617977528 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 10.2758426966 156% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 5.13820224719 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.83258426966 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.192099631896 0.243740707755 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0541184082102 0.0831039109588 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0461238473179 0.0758088955206 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.122371826215 0.150359130593 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0296541405675 0.0667264976115 44% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 14.1392134831 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 48.8420337079 120% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.43 12.1639044944 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.64 8.38706741573 103% => OK
difficult_words: 128.0 100.480337079 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.