The surest indicator of a great nation is represented not by the achievements of its rulers, artists, or scientists, but by the general welfare of its people.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
The achievements of notable people who are usually well known are mostly a source of motivation to many people. It also has a significant impact in achieving a well-developed nation but it is by no means the standard by which a country’s overall performance can be based on. I strongly agree with the posit that a nations success cannot be epitomized on the triumphs and victories of its successful men and women but rather by the standard of living of the entire populace. The two subsequent paragraphs of this essay will throw more light on my point of view.
Firstly, many leaders and experts based on their high position in the society can easily access a nations financial asset and could amass wealth for themselves through illegal means or by exploitation of the people they lead. For instance, in some African countries like Nigeria the political class are generally wealthy due to prevalent corrupt practices of using money meant for infrastructural development to pursue selfish purposes. They also award contract to unqualified contractors based on mutual agreement of kickbacks. The outcome is such that the state of infrastructure is left in shambles which makes life more difficult for the common man, even though the politicians could afford to buy big houses or jets for themselves in the country or outside the country, the general state of affairs is still in poor taste.
Furthermore, talented citizens such as musicians, artist e.t.c in most countries are generally not up to one percent of the total populace, therefore there is no justification to use them as an indicator of a nation’s greatness. A good example are the famous musicians like Davido, Wizkid, Burma, Tiwa Savage and Yemi Alade all from Nigeria in west Africa, even though they are all very rich and widely known, in fact, Davido is the artiste with the highest number of followers on the Instagram social media, their affluence cannot by any means be used to portray the lives of other citizens who are over 200 million in number. Available statistic shows that Nigeria is still an under developing state with over 60% of people still living below the poverty line. This goes a long way to show that the achievements of few individuals can not be used to indicate the overall welfare of most people in a country.
Finally, even though the investments made by politicians and turnover of few artists can generate revenue for the nation, it however, cannot be sufficient for the economic growth needed to better the lots of the country men and women hence a nations greatness can only be based on the overall well being of the common man and not on the attainments of those of high calibers and inventors.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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... can be based on. I strongly agree with the posit that a nations success cannot be epitom...
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'nations'' or 'nation's'?
Suggestion: nations'; nation's
... I strongly agree with the posit that a nations success cannot be epitomized on the tri...
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Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a nation' or simply 'nations'?
Suggestion: a nation; nations
...sition in the society can easily access a nations financial asset and could amass wealth ...
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Message: A more concise phrase may lose no meaning and sound more powerful.
Suggestion: million
...ives of other citizens who are over 200 million in number. Available statistic shows that Nigeria...
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'nations'' or 'nation's'?
Suggestion: nations'; nation's
...ts of the country men and women hence a nations greatness can only be based on the over...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, furthermore, hence, however, if, so, still, therefore, well, for instance, in fact, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.5258426966 108% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 14.8657303371 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 33.0505617978 64% => OK
Preposition: 73.0 58.6224719101 125% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 12.9106741573 70% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2243.0 2235.4752809 100% => OK
No of words: 458.0 442.535393258 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.89737991266 5.05705443957 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62611441266 4.55969084622 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73916890326 2.79657885939 98% => OK
Unique words: 255.0 215.323595506 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.556768558952 0.4932671777 113% => OK
syllable_count: 713.7 704.065955056 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.2370786517 64% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 35.0 23.0359550562 152% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 98.8517508143 60.3974514979 164% => OK
Chars per sentence: 172.538461538 118.986275619 145% => OK
Words per sentence: 35.2307692308 23.4991977007 150% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.76923076923 5.21951772744 187% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.139488029416 0.243740707755 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.049601565088 0.0831039109588 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0338807739805 0.0758088955206 45% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0831392401698 0.150359130593 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0351823480797 0.0667264976115 53% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.3 14.1392134831 136% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.95 48.8420337079 74% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.9 12.1743820225 139% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.73 12.1639044944 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.82 8.38706741573 117% => OK
difficult_words: 129.0 100.480337079 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.8971910112 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 16.0 11.2143820225 143% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.5 Out of 6
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