Teachers’ salaries should be based on their students’ academic performance.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
In any profession, including teachers, assessment and rewarding accordingly is critical. By setting a right standard for the rewarding scheme, we can clarify the role and responsibility of each profession. In the given statement, the speaker argues that teachers should be assessed and rewarded based on how well their students perform in the subjects. Although this may sound attractive for some people, I tend to disagree with this argument for the following reasons.
Firstly, the suggestion, focusing only on the academic performance, can be a threat for students’ learning. Throughout primary, secondary, and post secondary education, students learn not only from the units they take but also from participating in extracurricular activities, such as band, sports teams, and choir. However, if teachers’ wages were set mainly depending on their students’ academic performance, the teachers would probably put pressure on their students to focus more on their academic units. This seems to happen at the cost of their students’ opportunity to have diverse experiences. Thus, the idea of evaluating and compensating teachers based on their students’ academic performance could be detrimental for the students’ other learning experience outside of academic units.
Secondly, the suggestion is also deleterious for teachers since it can be a menace to their professional integrity. By solely relying on their students’ academic performance when discussing their efficacy, the given suggestion implicitly limits the role of a teacher to simply delivering a piece of knowledge for exams. If we think of our relationship with our own teachers, however, it is obvious that their roles were not just to assist us to perform well in our exams. According to my personal experiences with my teachers, they have advised on my future career, raised my spirit, and helped me to grow my confident. Thus, arguing that teachers should be evaluated and compensated based on how well their students perform in their exams not only just ignoring but severely denigrating teachers’ role as educators.
Of course, some people may still argue that there are some benefits in the suggestion above. By attracting teachers with their salaries to focus on academic performance of their students may improve the students’ level of learning to some extent. However, this has critical problems. Firstly, this may cause that teachers only focus on those students who can potentially perform better so that the average score of the class can increase. Secondly, even if teachers truly encourage all students to perform better in their units, the ‘academic performance’ that the students can achieve would be only limited to the knowledge that can be measured by a quantifiable method—exam. Thus, for the true learning and growing of our students, I contend that we should reject the idea of evaluating and reimbursing teachers based on their students’ academic performance.
To sum, although there could be some benefit of the given suggestion, I argue that it is still marginal and negligible, since it would cause only the partial students are benefitted in a very limited sense of learning. Therefore, to ensure comprehensive learning of our students and to protect professional integrity of teachers, we should contrive a more thorough payment scheme for teachers.
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Essay evaluation report
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arguments: OK
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 22 15
No. of Words: 524 350
No. of Characters: 2742 1500
No. of Different Words: 228 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.784 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.233 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.832 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 205 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 175 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 142 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 65 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.818 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.055 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.818 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.34 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.522 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.101 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Discourse Markers used:
['accordingly', 'also', 'but', 'first', 'firstly', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'second', 'secondly', 'so', 'still', 'therefore', 'thus', 'well', 'of course', 'such as']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.211974110032 0.240241500013 88% => OK
Verbs: 0.150485436893 0.157235817809 96% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0647249190939 0.0880659088768 73% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0711974110032 0.0497285424764 143% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0663430420712 0.0444667217837 149% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.12783171521 0.12292977631 104% => OK
Participles: 0.0582524271845 0.0406280797675 143% => OK
Conjunctions: 3.21883484317 2.79330140395 115% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0275080906149 0.030933414821 89% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.0016655270985 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.07928802589 0.0997080785238 80% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0323624595469 0.0249443105267 130% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00809061488673 0.0148568991511 54% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3413.0 2732.02544248 125% => OK
No of words: 523.0 452.878318584 115% => OK
Chars per words: 6.5258126195 6.0361032391 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.78217453174 4.58838876751 104% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.407265774379 0.366273622748 111% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.347992351816 0.280924506359 124% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.286806883365 0.200843997647 143% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.175908221797 0.132149295362 133% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.21883484317 2.79330140395 115% => OK
Unique words: 240.0 219.290929204 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.458891013384 0.48968727796 94% => OK
Word variations: 53.3706153541 55.4138127331 96% => OK
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6194690265 107% => OK
Sentence length: 23.7727272727 23.380412469 102% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.7789524552 59.4972553346 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 155.136363636 141.124799967 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.7727272727 23.380412469 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.772727272727 0.674092028746 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.94800884956 101% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.21349557522 0% => OK
Readability: 58.5719624544 51.4728631049 114% => OK
Elegance: 1.38202247191 1.64882698954 84% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.436156641102 0.391690518653 111% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.108713199073 0.123202303941 88% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0692592572699 0.077325440228 90% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.530152863394 0.547984918172 97% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.14917401375 0.149214159877 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.181878562385 0.161403998019 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0959631202152 0.0892212321368 108% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.409751872659 0.385218514788 106% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0493177686831 0.0692045440612 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.312801555806 0.275328986314 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0703020280307 0.0653680567796 108% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.4325221239 125% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.30420353982 113% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88274336283 61% => OK
Positive topic words: 10.0 7.22455752212 138% => OK
Negative topic words: 4.0 3.66592920354 109% => OK
Neutral topic words: 3.0 2.70907079646 111% => OK
Total topic words: 17.0 13.5995575221 125% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 70.83 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.25 Out of 6
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