Teachers' salaries should be based on their students' academic performance.
Many believe that the teachers should be paid on the basis of their students' academic performances. This is because they believe doing so would actually improve the overall academic performance of the students and that the teachers shall be paid on the basis of their merit in a particular academic year. This argument, however, is a controversial one mainly because it fails to consider the flip side. I do not concur with the aforementioned because of the reasons stated below.
Firstly, a student's performance in an academic year is not a holistic measure of what they learn in the classroom. There are many other factors involved. For instance, many students prefer going to tuitions and attending extra classes just because they think doing so would help escalate their academic grades. As a result, they hardly concentrate in the classroom because they think the topic being covered would be covered in a more profound manner in the tuitions and that they'd be able to grasp more of what is being taught by the tuition personnel. This acts as an impediment to the teachers' efforts to teach in the classrooms. Furthermore, a large part of the academic performance rests solely on the student. If a student develops an interest in the subject and puts his nose to the grindstone to learn each and every concept, he's much more likely to succeed than the student who does little to understand it mainly out of indolence or other distractions. The point being is that the teacher cannot account completely for the academic performance of the students and that the responsibility to score good rests heavily on the students' shoulders.
Secondly, if such a methodology were to be employed, many teachers would actually resort to home tutoring primarily because they are more concerned about their salaries than the students' understanding of the subject. In such a case, the situation descends into a tale of greediness and ultimately, it is the students who suffer. Additionally, If home tutoring is made compulsory, the entire schedule of the students is turned upside down. A student, on an average, spends about 6 hours in school. Employing such a policy would mean that the students would have no choice but to attend the extra tuitions even if that's not what they want. If, on an average, a student is made to attend 4 extra tuitions every day, each about an hour long, they'd spend (waste rather) a good 4-5 hours which could have, otherwise, been very well utilized for recreational activities. On returning back home, they'd only have a handful of time to play, do homework, watch TV, undertake household chores etc. Imagine the amount of pressure being put on the students. Consequently, the sleep pattern is affected, the overall physical and mental well being is stagnated and life becomes mundane. In such a situation how can you expect a student to perform well in the exams? The plan ultimately backfires.
In addition to that, if a teacher's salary were to be based on students' academic performance, this would bring about a biased way of giving of marks. We have to be largely aware of the fact that students' test papers are graded by teachers, and if a teacher receives a higher salary were the student to perform well, needless to say there would be many unscrupulous individuals who would accord their students higher marks to their own benefit. Critics might argue that assessment of a particular class of students can be done by a different teacher, but I foresee a system that would be plagued with corruption and bribery. What if the class teacher bribes another teacher, or what if the teacher intentionally gives bad grades because they know that it would affect the class teacher (who might be someone they do not favor)? Many what-ifs might take place which would ultimately jeopardize and challenge the education system. In light of that, I think that the statement is not valid and sound.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, consequently, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, second, secondly, so, well, for instance, i think, in addition, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 35.0 19.5258426966 179% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 21.0 12.4196629213 169% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 14.8657303371 114% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.3162921348 168% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 33.0505617978 127% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 76.0 58.6224719101 130% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 12.9106741573 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3259.0 2235.4752809 146% => OK
No of words: 663.0 442.535393258 150% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.91553544495 5.05705443957 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.07432619952 4.55969084622 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71195915655 2.79657885939 97% => OK
Unique words: 310.0 215.323595506 144% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.467571644042 0.4932671777 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1008.9 704.065955056 143% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 10.0 4.99550561798 200% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.2370786517 143% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 67.7918230489 60.3974514979 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.379310345 118.986275619 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.8620689655 23.4991977007 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.03448275862 5.21951772744 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 7.80617977528 128% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.83258426966 248% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.308288810321 0.243740707755 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0869597265688 0.0831039109588 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0897038971311 0.0758088955206 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.21086028107 0.150359130593 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0551973338363 0.0667264976115 83% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 14.1392134831 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 48.8420337079 118% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 12.1639044944 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.18 8.38706741573 98% => OK
difficult_words: 145.0 100.480337079 144% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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