Technology, while apparently aimed to simplify our lives, only makes our lives more complicated.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
Nowadays, technology has become predominantly significant in people's lives. Everyone seems to be dependent on technology, from simple things in life such as ordering food online, to confound situations such as scientific research and analysis. It is certainly obvious that technology is important and almost irreplaceable. Yet, does technology actually simplify our lives? It arises a rather controversial issue. Personally, I believe instead of making our lives easier, technology is definitely creating more convolution in our lives.
On the one hand, technology can be a double-sided sword. With the sufficient information provided by technology, admittedly, people gain access to things they could hardly ever reach before the existence of contemporary technology. However, under this easily-acquired structural frame towards public or personal information, it is true that people's privacy are invaded. Such technology-incited vulnerability is bringing complication to people's lives. Many incidents regarding private information leakage had happened in the United States or all around the world, such as kidnaps, commercial theft, loss of digital files...etc. These type of information damage complicate people's lives dramatically.
On the other hand, the prosperity of technology industry can increase the cost of living to the general public and thus deeply polarize the economic situation, thus complexes our lives. Though technological development is rarely classified as a negative impact, it is indisputable that such development will surely exacerbate the economical gap between the rich and the poor. More advanced things will be invented, bettered, and sold at a higher price, which stimulates the market of the capable. Such well-off members of the society will invest even more back into the technological market and therefore create more wealth. Whereas the lower end of economic ladder will mostly likely stay stagnated in terms of economic growth and prosperity. In this case, the gap of the quality of living will continue to expand and eventually become the unstable factor of the society in terms of economy, which furthers undermines the simplicity of our lives.
In a word, while technology does aim to provide a series of benefits in order to simplify people's lives, its ability to complicate our lives is inevitable. From daily lives to professional worlds, technology never stops to make our lives more complicated.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 97, Rule ID: GENERAL_XX[1]
Message: Use simply 'public'.
Suggestion: public
... can increase the cost of living to the general public and thus deeply polarize the economic s...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, however, if, regarding, so, therefore, thus, well, whereas, while, such as, it is true, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.5258426966 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 14.8657303371 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.3162921348 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 33.0505617978 61% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 58.6224719101 87% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 12.9106741573 77% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2083.0 2235.4752809 93% => OK
No of words: 368.0 442.535393258 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.66032608696 5.05705443957 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37987740619 4.55969084622 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.15453317819 2.79657885939 113% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 215.323595506 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.592391304348 0.4932671777 120% => OK
syllable_count: 675.9 704.065955056 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.59117977528 113% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.38483146067 205% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 49.7528642392 60.3974514979 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.15 118.986275619 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4 23.4991977007 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.75 5.21951772744 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.171032489726 0.243740707755 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.054214445087 0.0831039109588 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0609891526259 0.0758088955206 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.12072629813 0.150359130593 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0614968123955 0.0667264976115 92% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 14.1392134831 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.28 48.8420337079 74% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.1743820225 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.55 12.1639044944 128% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.25 8.38706741573 110% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 100.480337079 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 11.8971910112 63% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 11.7820224719 136% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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