There is a school of thought that says that the most experienced workers should be promoted to management However some businesses prefer to select manages based on their perceived leadership skills regardless of how much experience they have

According to the prompt, businesses primarily select their management based of the two criteria: experience, and leadership skills. Although this two are totally different from each other, I prefer not to create a management solely based on one. Or, I would rather say, I tend to go with both of them. And In the next three paragraphs, I will explain my dual position.

First of all, experience is a must for any organization. Take cricket, for example. All the cricket playing nations create board and management with senior members who have experience with cricket, national or international level. Because, a president of a board, say, will not understand which coach should be hired for his or her team, or, which player should be selected as the captain of the team unless he understands and has experience with cricket. In such a case, experience plays a much greater role than leadership skills.

However, just like experience, leadership skills are also must needed for some case. After all, members of management are the leaders of their organization. To manage the employees those work under a leader, to organize a ceremony, to persuade other companies to collude in order to profit more, one must have leadership skills. Even if the leaders of a company have enough experience without having leadership skills, they will not be able to handle the company in a proper way. Thus, a management should not be consists of the members who lack leadership skills.

Consider a company that creates a management that contains both experience and leadership skills. This management knows when to do, what to do with the help of their vast experience, and also knows how to do with the power of their leadership skill. Therefore it is safe to conclude that this company would certainly outperform the other companies whose management contain either experience or leadership skills, and not both.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 64, Rule ID: PRP_PAST_PART[2]
Message: Did you mean 'have needed' or 'need'?
Suggestion: have needed; need
...rience, leadership skills are also must needed for some case. After all, members of ma...
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Line 5, column 464, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a proper way" with adverb for "proper"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
... will not be able to handle the company in a proper way. Thus, a management should not be consi...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...th the power of their leadership skill. Therefore it is safe to conclude that this compan...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, so, therefore, thus, after all, for example, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 19.5258426966 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 14.8657303371 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 33.0505617978 67% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 58.6224719101 72% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 12.9106741573 163% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1594.0 2235.4752809 71% => OK
No of words: 314.0 442.535393258 71% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.07643312102 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20951839842 4.55969084622 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78969984954 2.79657885939 100% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 215.323595506 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.53821656051 0.4932671777 109% => OK
syllable_count: 484.2 704.065955056 69% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 51.579816873 60.3974514979 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.7647058824 118.986275619 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4705882353 23.4991977007 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.88235294118 5.21951772744 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.2758426966 68% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.83258426966 166% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.312735487521 0.243740707755 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0996918442834 0.0831039109588 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0574490619976 0.0758088955206 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.188223822473 0.150359130593 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0285480106927 0.0667264976115 43% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 14.1392134831 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 48.8420337079 126% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.1743820225 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.18 12.1639044944 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.35 8.38706741573 88% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 100.480337079 56% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 11.8971910112 59% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.


Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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