“The true value of a civilization is reflected in its artistic creations rather than in its scientific accomplishments.”
Scientific discoveries, while appreciated widely by contemporary people, only have an immediate application value and do not always appeal to people’s feelings. On the other hand, artistic creation transcends in space and time that always touch the bottom of people’s hearts, and even espoused by numerous progeny thereafter. Countless pieces of historical evidences establish the fact that a highly developed economic society with escalating GDPs by which no or insufficient artistic achievements are upheld cannot be labeled as a true or great civilization. Worse still, its economic development could not maintain long enough if it were not for the support of artistic elements, be they talents, facilities and performances. In light of it, I totally agree with the author’s assertion that artist creations are more crucial in reflecting and maintaining the values of a civilization.
When a society merely stresses the importance of scientific accomplishments or development and at the same time overlooks artistic creations, the qualities of its citizens as a whole are worse off. Not only in the past, when one is looking at today’s splendid cities such as New York, London, Frankfurt and Tokyo, one will dawn on that they are not only economic capitals but also art centers. In history of humankind, there have had never been a highly economic city without artistic creations. Let us get down to fundamentals and agree that Paris but not Silicon Valley is a true civilization.
Then why a society with scientific accomplishments is not qualified to be a true civilization? A state-of-the art airport, a world class skyscraper or a modernized and efficient mass transport system are not enough to become a splendid and glorious city. These (and many other astounding scientific achievements) will become timeworn one day. Neither a few Andrew Lloyd Webber performances nor a fabulous city hall does not constitute it to be a civilized society. The critical key is they are only “hardware”. Artistic creations also need “software” -- intellectuals.
Compared with scientific accomplishments, artistic creations tend to reflect all walks of life in a society: the former only provides us with real life conveniences and enhance our understanding to what has been regarded a mystery but the latter can improve our spiritual quality. There is no doubt that artistic creations help heighten people’s sensation to truth, kindness, and beauty. For example, Dr. David Ho’s insightful discovery on the cause of Aid indeed put us a bigger step to the understanding on this strain of virus. Yet Beethoven’s 9 symphonies taught us to appreciate the composer’s struggle with life and his perseverance.
Last but not least, the true value of civilization is displaying in terms of its artistic creations as well as scientific achievements. But it is only the former to reflect human intrinsic qualities. Scientific achievements are of necessary in the sense that it help improve our extrinsic quality of living. It is an undeniable fact that 100 years later our posterity will pay serious attention to literature, paintings and other art genres rather than the cloning technology when studying history.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 458, Rule ID: NOW[2]
Message: Did you mean 'now' (=at this moment) instead of 'no' (negation)?
Suggestion: now
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, look, so, still, then, well, while, for example, no doubt, such as, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.5258426966 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 26.0 14.8657303371 175% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 33.0505617978 97% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 58.6224719101 94% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 12.9106741573 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2724.0 2235.4752809 122% => OK
No of words: 506.0 442.535393258 114% => OK
Chars per words: 5.38339920949 5.05705443957 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.7428307748 4.55969084622 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.22873117762 2.79657885939 115% => OK
Unique words: 282.0 215.323595506 131% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.557312252964 0.4932671777 113% => OK
syllable_count: 836.1 704.065955056 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.2370786517 114% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.9311959174 60.3974514979 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.434782609 118.986275619 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0 23.4991977007 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.86956521739 5.21951772744 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.2758426966 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.352482863584 0.243740707755 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0882802060093 0.0831039109588 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.100439532044 0.0758088955206 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.182747294035 0.150359130593 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0802945686178 0.0667264976115 120% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 14.1392134831 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 48.8420337079 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 12.1743820225 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.92 12.1639044944 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.35 8.38706741573 111% => OK
difficult_words: 148.0 100.480337079 147% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 16.0 11.8971910112 134% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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