ucial that the young understand this idea very well and the reasoning behind it very well. Instilling qualites like co-operation in them from an early age becomes very pressing.
It is veracious that the next generation of leaders should be co-operative leaders and not "heroes". The idea of co-operative leadership is gaining momentum and popularity. It's surge was inevitable and the idea is slowly throwing out the previously held beliefs in the competence of the hero-like personalities from hackeneyed tales. An individualistic and competitive "hero" will be an anachroism by the end of the decade in the leadership sphere.
As the complexity of the ideals and functioning of the government, industry and all other sectors increases exponentially, harmonius working of people like a well-oiled machine is the only natural solution. It is crucial that the young understand this idea very well and the reasoning behind it very well. Instilling qualites like co-operation in them from an early age becomes very pressing.
As every vertical in a setting strives to be better, there cannot be one mighty leader who should be entrusted with the duty to look after all of the details that are interdisciplinary in nature. The modern education system aims to specialize then why do we expect our leaders to understand absolutely everything that goes on? It is impractical and in a lot of cases outright impossible. A person heading a space mission cannot have the specific knowledge about every aspect of the spacecraft spanning from payload engineering to structural integrity. Only a team of leaders can achieve this complex feat. Specialization is essential in this ever growing industry age. People with diverse backgrounds should be a part of committees leading complex project for success. A variety of ideas on the table is what fosters creativity and thrives and adapts in a fast changing environment.
In the modern context, this makes more sense than ever. The idea of egoistic leadership fails to fit in the world we live in today. A plethora of corporates have already adopted the ideals of co-operative leadership. Flatter heirarchy systems are gaining popularity and slowly phasing out the outdated top-bottom institution that was already in place. People are becoming increasingly welcoming to this idea as they understand its relevance in today's world. The best way to prepare the young for these new ideals is if they imbibe it while they're young and mouldable.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: they're
...e new ideals is if they imbibe it while theyre young and mouldable.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, look, so, still, then, well, while, after all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.5258426966 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 14.8657303371 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.3162921348 53% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 33.0505617978 73% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 58.6224719101 90% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 12.9106741573 77% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1961.0 2235.4752809 88% => OK
No of words: 370.0 442.535393258 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.3 5.05705443957 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38581623665 4.55969084622 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.18086522494 2.79657885939 114% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 215.323595506 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.578378378378 0.4932671777 117% => OK
syllable_count: 626.4 704.065955056 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.99550561798 160% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 23.0359550562 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.8047828298 60.3974514979 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.380952381 118.986275619 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.619047619 23.4991977007 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.33333333333 5.21951772744 45% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.350232590081 0.243740707755 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0975418545032 0.0831039109588 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.171960996476 0.0758088955206 227% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.235762891285 0.150359130593 157% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.255786132894 0.0667264976115 383% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 14.1392134831 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 48.8420337079 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.16 12.1639044944 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.34 8.38706741573 111% => OK
difficult_words: 114.0 100.480337079 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 11.8971910112 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.2143820225 78% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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