To understand the most important characteristics of a society, one must study its major cities.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position
The given statement asserts that without studying the major cities, one cannot understand the important characteristics of a society. To some extent, it is true that studying main cities is critical when understanding characteristics of a society. However, since the argument is too strong, I cannot fully agree with the statement.
Needless to say, it is undeniable that main cities of a country often not only to be the capital of history, culture, and politics, but also to be highly populated. In case of countries that have kept the same main cities for centuries, it would make no sense to say one has a good understanding of the country without knowing the important aspects of the main city. How can a person say he knows France when he has totally missed out Paris? What about understanding Italy without studying Rome? Can one say she has a basic knowledge of Britain if she has totally overlooked the city of London? At least for understanding these countries, it would not be exaggerating to say it is a ‘must’ to study their main cities.
However, when it comes to other countries, whose small cities tell us more about the various aspects of the society rather than the main cities, the statement that one ‘must’ focus on the main cities cannot convince us. Although the most populated, main cities of Australia are Sydney, Melbourne and Canberra, limiting oneself to these cities would not be helpful when understanding the country. Rather, the small cities in the Northern and inland part of Australia, in which the most of Indigenous Australians resided, would provide more useful information for understanding the Australian society. This shows that for some countries studying main cities only provides limited and superficial information of the society.
Moreover, in the globalized modern world, focusing on large cosmopolitan cities may distract us or even mislead us from grasping important features of a society. Since most of the big cities of each country experience an increase of immigrants and travellers with diverse cultural background, simply relying on these main cities would hinder us from seeing the real picture of the society. Although studying the city of London may provide us with recent change of Britain experiences in terms of globalization, it would be difficult to understand the traditional value of Britain, which may be still held by the community members in a small town.
To sum, although looking closely at the major cities of a country is important, especially for countries that have accumulated their historical and social values in their capital cities, it is also limited in other cases. Therefore, I cannot fully agree with the given statement that studying main cities is a ‘must’ to obtain a good understanding of a country.
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Essay evaluation report
it is undeniable that main cities of a country often not only to be the capital of history, culture, and politics, but also to be highly populated.
it is undeniable that the main cities of a country are often not only to be the capital of history, culture, and politics, but also to be highly populated.
flaws:
Need to focus on 'the most important characteristics of a society', not 'some important characteristics of a society'
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 1 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 458 350
No. of Characters: 2271 1500
No. of Different Words: 201 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.626 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.959 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.792 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 170 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 126 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 80 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 55 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 25.444 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.645 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.556 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.376 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.589 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.169 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'however', 'if', 'look', 'may', 'moreover', 'so', 'still', 'therefore', 'as to', 'at least', 'it is true']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.204724409449 0.240241500013 85% => OK
Verbs: 0.147637795276 0.157235817809 94% => OK
Adjectives: 0.108267716535 0.0880659088768 123% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0590551181102 0.0497285424764 119% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0472440944882 0.0444667217837 106% => OK
Prepositions: 0.133858267717 0.12292977631 109% => OK
Participles: 0.0551181102362 0.0406280797675 136% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.90105334078 2.79330140395 104% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0236220472441 0.030933414821 76% => OK
Particles: 0.00196850393701 0.0016655270985 118% => OK
Determiners: 0.106299212598 0.0997080785238 107% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0295275590551 0.0249443105267 118% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0216535433071 0.0148568991511 146% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2807.0 2732.02544248 103% => OK
No of words: 458.0 452.878318584 101% => OK
Chars per words: 6.1288209607 6.0361032391 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62611441266 4.58838876751 101% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.384279475983 0.366273622748 105% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.301310043668 0.280924506359 107% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.211790393013 0.200843997647 105% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.133187772926 0.132149295362 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90105334078 2.79330140395 104% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 219.290929204 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.454148471616 0.48968727796 93% => OK
Word variations: 50.5589657273 55.4138127331 91% => OK
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6194690265 87% => OK
Sentence length: 25.4444444444 23.380412469 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.2691555101 59.4972553346 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 155.944444444 141.124799967 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.4444444444 23.380412469 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.722222222222 0.674092028746 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.94800884956 101% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.21349557522 0% => OK
Readability: 55.5754488113 51.4728631049 108% => OK
Elegance: 1.5503875969 1.64882698954 94% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.439578002609 0.391690518653 112% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.127645360181 0.123202303941 104% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0789203079618 0.077325440228 102% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.596177790692 0.547984918172 109% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.170483481725 0.149214159877 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.193625483606 0.161403998019 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.103010576116 0.0892212321368 115% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.408453342048 0.385218514788 106% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0962796153689 0.0692045440612 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.315513742223 0.275328986314 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0555634200432 0.0653680567796 85% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.4325221239 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 5.30420353982 170% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88274336283 41% => OK
Positive topic words: 7.0 7.22455752212 97% => OK
Negative topic words: 9.0 3.66592920354 246% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 2.70907079646 74% => OK
Total topic words: 18.0 13.5995575221 132% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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