To understand the most important characteristics of a society, one must study its major cities.
A city is considerable as representative of a country or a region. With its complexity due to dense population from various background, a city could describes the characteristic of its country or its region. It is tempting to believe that the characteristic of a society will be comprehensively understood when we conduct a deeper research on its major cities.
Furthermore, all great civilizations have had a flourishing cities. The government/king/queen have been living here. To understand most of its people, the way in which it is ruled, we must understand the city. In addition, cities have most of qualified universities and jobs which contribute to economic aspect and prosperity of society.
With these evidences, it is easy to believe that by studying the city, the characteristic of a society will be easily concluded. However, I argue that how the way society live its life is not as simply as knowing the life of its city. Moreover, in a developed countries, there is a huge inequality of many aspects. For example, Indonesia has a largest archipelago with its huge variation of tribes, cultures, beliefs, etc. The cities in Indonesia only represent few of Indonesian people. The most population have been agricultural, and many rituals can only be understood in the context of a rural backdrop.
So, while there are arguments that city is the best area for studying a society, it is clear that there is a wiser way to put rural background as main aspects in assessing a society, especially for developing or low-income countries.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 150, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'could' requires the base form of the verb: 'describe'
Suggestion: describe
...n from various background, a city could describes the characteristic of its country or it...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 61, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'city'?
Suggestion: city
...at civilizations have had a flourishing cities. The government/king/queen have been li...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 343, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[1]
Message: Use 'the' with the superlative.
Suggestion: the
...any aspects. For example, Indonesia has a largest archipelago with its huge varia...
^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, however, if, moreover, so, while, for example, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.5258426966 77% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.4196629213 40% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 14.8657303371 40% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 33.0505617978 64% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 58.6224719101 51% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 5.0 12.9106741573 39% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1298.0 2235.4752809 58% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 255.0 442.535393258 58% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.09019607843 5.05705443957 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.99608801488 4.55969084622 88% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.35163143781 2.79657885939 120% => OK
Unique words: 137.0 215.323595506 64% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.537254901961 0.4932671777 109% => OK
syllable_count: 423.0 704.065955056 60% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.2370786517 69% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 45.9339032675 60.3974514979 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.7142857143 118.986275619 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2142857143 23.4991977007 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.42857142857 5.21951772744 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 10.2758426966 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.83258426966 166% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.281115858491 0.243740707755 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0789561356233 0.0831039109588 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0762558357996 0.0758088955206 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.152983334109 0.150359130593 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0522326701268 0.0667264976115 78% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 14.1392134831 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 48.8420337079 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.24 12.1639044944 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.99 8.38706741573 107% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 100.480337079 72% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 11.8971910112 63% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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