eople's behavior is largely determined by external forces, not to their own making.
The author of the topic states an assertion that people's behavior is largely determined by external forces, not to their own making. While some may argue that this statement holds true all the time, others may counter that claim by providing examples. In my essay, I will highlight both sides of the argument, and also provide sound reasoning for my claims.
On one hand, the assertion seems probable. Because it is very difficult to understand the behavior of humans as they are the most complicated creature on planet earth. One can not firmly says that the behavior of human is influenced by external force or not. But as we are living in the internet era where we have a various social media platform like Facebook, Twitter, etc through which we can influence one's behavior, we can not completely deny that we are not get influenced by external force, for example, the various report asserted that during the presidential election in the USA in the year 2016, the social media sites, especially Facebook, influence the Voter to vote for Mr. Trump, the then-presidential candidate from the Republican party.
Though we have numerous examples where people make free decisions and live their lives without external influences like former Indian cricket Captian MS Dhoni was forced by his parents to join Indian Railways but he makes his decision by pursuing his dream to play for India and he made it, but we cannot deny that people's behavior is determined by external forces not largely bu up to some extent .
In a nutshell, people’s behavior is not only determined by outside factors but also determined by people’s own characteristics and views of the world.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, so, then, while, as for, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 19.5258426966 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 14.8657303371 61% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 33.0505617978 85% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 58.6224719101 60% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 7.0 12.9106741573 54% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1402.0 2235.4752809 63% => OK
No of words: 280.0 442.535393258 63% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.00714285714 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09062348924 4.55969084622 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74425915708 2.79657885939 98% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 215.323595506 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.607142857143 0.4932671777 123% => OK
syllable_count: 435.6 704.065955056 62% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 6.24550561798 32% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 20.2370786517 44% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 23.0359550562 135% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 144.762982104 60.3974514979 240% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 155.777777778 118.986275619 131% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.1111111111 23.4991977007 132% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.22222222222 5.21951772744 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 10.2758426966 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.238163775245 0.243740707755 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.111125884613 0.0831039109588 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.154969838674 0.0758088955206 204% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.149493600987 0.150359130593 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0626303604194 0.0667264976115 94% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.7 14.1392134831 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.01 48.8420337079 82% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 12.1743820225 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.37 12.1639044944 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.46 8.38706741573 113% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 100.480337079 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 11.8971910112 63% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 11.2143820225 128% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.