To understand the most important characteristics of a society, one must study its major cities.
Many would say that studying major cities is the best way to understand society. In some sense, it is true that important characteristics of a society can be easily observed where the majority live. In my opinion, however, I still believe that major cities, nowadays, tend to lose society’s traditional values due to globalization.
Needless to say, it is undeniable that large cities in a country can provide some distinct features of it in the most effective ways. In many small countries, which lack the cultural or geographical diversities, we can best understand the critical characteristics of those countries by perambulating several major cities. Especially, they are advantageous because those cities usually have many cultural facilities to detect the history, culture and social lives of citizens, including museums, governmental offices, and public parks where citizens’ everyday lives can be observed closely. With these facilities and some conspicuous and distinct features of those countries, there would be no another area to understand the whole countries in a very short time. This means that we can best understand the general characteristics of a society by analyzing its major cities.
However, in the age of global market, most of the world’s large metropolitan areas are designed or redesigned according to their economic goals, thus may mislead us to understand the uniqueness of the country they belong to. Although New York is one of major cities of the United States, the daily activities (that) take place here would have much more differences than similarities when we compare it with other areas of the states. It is not difficult to enumerate many large cities in many countries which have the similar problems to New York, thus they are not helpful to grasp the distinct and unique cultural aspects of a country.
Moreover, large cities may be inappropriate to understand the historical and cultural idiosyncrasy of a society because of their main functions or relationship with surrounding suburban and rural areas. In some countries which have greater range of cultural spectrum and diversities, the main functions of large cities are usually limited to serve some economic and administrational purposes to help their respective suburban lives. In this case, it is not the downtowns of large cities but the suburban and rural areas where we can really detect the core values of the typical citizens. In addition, from these countries, it would be superficial and vacuous to observe two or three large cities in order to understand the whole variety of the cultural elements of the country. In Spain where diverse cultural or ethnic subgroups are mixed, it would be ridiculous to say that I understand and am versed the culture of Spain simply with visiting to Barcelona and Madrid. This also says that large cities are sometimes inappropriate to grasp the whole picture of a society.
To sum, despite the efficiency of studying several large cities in understanding a culture, both lack of cultural representativeness of some global cities and difficulty to include the cultural diversity in some countries tell us that large cities are not always the best means to understand the characteristics of a country. Taken together, I cannot fully agree with the speaker’s assertion. Only by ignoring these problems could one claim that we need only to observe several large cities to understand a society.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, moreover, really, so, still, thus, in addition, in my opinion, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.5258426966 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.4196629213 129% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 14.8657303371 135% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.3162921348 159% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 33.0505617978 136% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 78.0 58.6224719101 133% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 12.9106741573 23% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2909.0 2235.4752809 130% => OK
No of words: 552.0 442.535393258 125% => OK
Chars per words: 5.26992753623 5.05705443957 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.84713113593 4.55969084622 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.05475342004 2.79657885939 109% => OK
Unique words: 241.0 215.323595506 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.436594202899 0.4932671777 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 939.6 704.065955056 133% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 6.24550561798 192% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 12.0 4.38483146067 274% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 23.0359550562 117% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.2214164663 60.3974514979 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 145.45 118.986275619 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.6 23.4991977007 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.1 5.21951772744 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 7.80617977528 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.198236094706 0.243740707755 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0732214530362 0.0831039109588 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.075831265515 0.0758088955206 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.133624996592 0.150359130593 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0774495345263 0.0667264976115 116% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.2 14.1392134831 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.61 48.8420337079 73% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 12.1743820225 123% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.58 12.1639044944 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.52 8.38706741573 102% => OK
difficult_words: 124.0 100.480337079 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 11.2143820225 114% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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