The pretentious life of a show-off revolves largely around false-pride and vanity. Vainglorious individuals direct all the attention and the efforts in the hope of impressing the other people. Not only do they try to display gaudy facade to their overall life, but also trying to cover their blemishes is a major concern. Devoting a life to a materialistic indulgence: luxury cars, large mansions, trendy apparels, association with the aristocrats are some of attempts of an appealing charm.
The case of celebrities is a prime example. Undergoing facial surgeries, reconstruction techniques, heavy cosmetic make-ups paired with ostentatious clothing and ornaments is a daily routine for these stars. A tv star walking through a park in loose pyjamas is a situation unthought of. The response of the public is partly responsible for the mannerisms adopted by these showy people; the traditions displayed by these popular personalities is acknowledged and lionized, by large. Granted that it behooves them to be in good shape round the clock, but judging them only by the virtue of their appurtenances is parochial. What this leads to is an ignorance of the real values.
In addition to the appealing life of renowned personas, the case of peer pressure among kids also has the same underpinning. It is not baffling to find teenagers using latest iPhones, cycling $200 bikes apart from owning a variety of other high end gadgets. This creates a sense of need in the peers as well, to approach life in a similar fashion; disregarding the more important needs of the time, viz. education and learning.
Though, it is true that many follow and cater to the life of charms, but there is a silverlining too. Consider the CEO of Facebook Inc. as an example. Mark Zuckerberg wears the same gray t-shirt everyday; and why does he do that-because it saves him time! This is real value, focussing on the things that matter, instead of superficial and wishful thinking. There are numerous examples of people who have their own code and principles, who give priority to the length and breadth of things rather than a tangential approach.
In essence, the budding inclination of the contemporary society towards appeals and charms is a matter of concern. Discarding the crux for the shiny layer never serves good. Significant change comes from the right from the grassroot, and will take time and the collective efforts of many. Hoping that the ideology of analysing subjects in detail shall be prevalent and highly regarded, we can hope for a better future for mankind.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 453, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'some of', you should use 'the' ('some of the attempts') or simply say ''some attempts''.
Suggestion: some of the attempts; some attempts
...s, association with the aristocrats are some of attempts of an appealing charm. The case of...
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Line 1, column 493, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...some of attempts of an appealing charm. The case of celebrities is a prime examp...
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Line 5, column 325, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a similar fashion" with adverb for "similar"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
... in the peers as well, to approach life in a similar fashion; disregarding the more important needs ...
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Line 7, column 196, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
... Zuckerberg wears the same gray t-shirt everyday; and why does he do that-because it sav...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, regarding, so, well, apart from, in addition, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.5258426966 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 12.4196629213 32% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 14.8657303371 114% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 33.0505617978 76% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 58.6224719101 96% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 12.9106741573 77% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2144.0 2235.4752809 96% => OK
No of words: 423.0 442.535393258 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.06855791962 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53508145475 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88494931669 2.79657885939 103% => OK
Unique words: 262.0 215.323595506 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.61938534279 0.4932671777 126% => OK
syllable_count: 660.6 704.065955056 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.77640449438 281% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.2370786517 114% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 53.0011591698 60.3974514979 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.2173913043 118.986275619 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.3913043478 23.4991977007 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.08695652174 5.21951772744 59% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.83258426966 166% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0787979172493 0.243740707755 32% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0210718553767 0.0831039109588 25% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0356631782098 0.0758088955206 47% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0390797419525 0.150359130593 26% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0208486542411 0.0667264976115 31% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 14.1392134831 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.8420337079 109% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 12.1639044944 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.31 8.38706741573 111% => OK
difficult_words: 128.0 100.480337079 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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