The speaker asserts that it has become more important today to create an appealing image than the reality or truth behind that image. I concede the increasing importance of appealing image. However, I disagree with the view that its importance has outweighed that of reality or truth because they are still among the top concerns of people in whatever situations.
The most common case must be the commercial advertising. It may be true in the past, when the consumers' interests are more difficult to maintain, that creating an appealing image is more important because the risk of being accused of bad qualities was not as much as today. However, thanks to the improvement of laws to protect the consumers' interests, these companies should be very careful about the quality of their products. If they overemphasis on the appearance but ignore the quality, they would probably end up spending more money compensating the consumers. For example, in China, when you buy something online, you deserve the rights to get refunded in a week without the need of giving any explanations. If one company's products are good in appearance but poor at qualities, then they will have to refund for every product they have sold. Therefore, in contemporary society, despite the short-term effect on advertising of an appealing image, the truth and quality beneath it are far more important in the long run.
Beyond the advertising, this conclusion stills holds true when it comes to the academia. Researchers today, faced by the increasing pressure on publication, have to try their best to polish a paper to make it published. Admittedly, the appearances--its writing, illustrations, and logic in the paper--are always important. However, with only these things, even if it can get published, years later, when people finally find that there is nothing valuable beneath it, it will be criticized by the whole academia, and the reputation of the author goes with it as well as the career. No researcher dare to risk their career to do such risky things. Therefore, even in academia, the truth behind the appearances is still more important.
In other aspects, the situation is similar. Therefore, although it is certainly important to have an appealing image, in whatever aspects, more vital is to have the reality or truth beneath it.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, however, if, may, so, still, then, therefore, well, as to, for example, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.5258426966 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 14.8657303371 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 33.0505617978 103% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 58.6224719101 96% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 12.9106741573 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1950.0 2235.4752809 87% => OK
No of words: 382.0 442.535393258 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.10471204188 5.05705443957 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42095241839 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87807671314 2.79657885939 103% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 215.323595506 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.549738219895 0.4932671777 111% => OK
syllable_count: 614.7 704.065955056 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.10617977528 225% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.8823720521 60.3974514979 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.333333333 118.986275619 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2222222222 23.4991977007 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.33333333333 5.21951772744 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 7.80617977528 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.228895887581 0.243740707755 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0727001953079 0.0831039109588 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0949574633968 0.0758088955206 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.159052050086 0.150359130593 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0993235153997 0.0667264976115 149% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 14.1392134831 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.8420337079 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.3 12.1639044944 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.32 8.38706741573 99% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 100.480337079 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.8971910112 76% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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