As we acquire more knowledge things do not become more comprehensible but more complex and mysterious | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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As we acquire more knowledge, things do not become more comprehensible, but more complex and mysterious.

There is a very common proverb, “Little learning is a dangerous thing”. In recent times, acquiring knowledge is the fastest way to get success in any field of work. As we move towards our future, new technologies will be important and to invent them basic knowledge is important. The prompt concludes that with more acquired knowledge things get more complex and more mysterious because a lot of information (includes the obsolete information also) need to be remembered. In my opinion, I mostly disagree with this statement because of the following two reasons.
Firstly, knowing little is quite useful if the knowledge is right and concise. But can it be said that less knowledge will be helpful to grow further? For example, initial idea of atomic model was given by scientist Thomson, which was not accurate, and his model was called into question. Then Ratharford publish his atomic model theories, which was more accurate than Thomson Atomic Model and this model could answered a lot of questions. But all confusions were not cleared. Then Niles Bores Atomic Models were helpful to answer many more question generated from Ratharford Atomic Model. So, if scientist do not try to acquire knowledge about their surroundings, then how come they will be able to question? So, getting more knowledge in any field is helpful rather to solve mysteries.
Secondly, after getting more knowledge people can choose which one is useful for them. It is not necessary to know everything about every topic. But it is important to know the right thing. Without knowing the whole topic, it is difficult to come into conclusions that which one is right, and which one is wrong. For example, one of the most dangerous nuclear explosions is the one that happened in Chernobyl. The nuclear scientist of that project were very well known about work and the project they were doing. At the night when the explosion occurred, they tried to control the situation just before the explosion took place. But there was something that previously happened with another nuclear powerplant, they were not aware of that occurrence. If they were knowledgeable of that event, then this huge Chernobyl explosion could be controlled. So, knowing the whole thing will help to reduce the risk of danger in some case. How can anyone say that things become complex and mysterious by acquiring vast knowledge?
Some may argue that knowing much information on any specific topic sometimes may confounded people, then comes people’s self-realization, which will help them what to consider as right and what not. But this can not be the only reason of knowing not more. Technologies are growing in a very increasing rate. If we do not acuire more knowledge about them, then we will not be able to cope up with this competitive world. Knowledge is that which can be used to conquer the world.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 411, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'could' requires the base form of the verb: 'answer'
Suggestion: answer
...omson Atomic Model and this model could answered a lot of questions. But all confusions ...
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Line 4, column 10, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'argues'.
Suggestion: argues
... by acquiring vast knowledge? Some may argue that knowing much information on any sp...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, well, for example, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 36.0 19.5258426966 184% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.4196629213 129% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.3162921348 168% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 33.0505617978 115% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 58.6224719101 90% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 12.9106741573 77% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2383.0 2235.4752809 107% => OK
No of words: 478.0 442.535393258 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.98535564854 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67581127817 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64358752405 2.79657885939 95% => OK
Unique words: 235.0 215.323595506 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.491631799163 0.4932671777 100% => OK
syllable_count: 734.4 704.065955056 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.77640449438 394% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.2370786517 143% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 23.0359550562 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.1552308459 60.3974514979 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.1724137931 118.986275619 69% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.4827586207 23.4991977007 70% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.31034482759 5.21951772744 63% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.83258426966 186% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.287104184232 0.243740707755 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0758957383024 0.0831039109588 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.102397715449 0.0758088955206 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.196552719221 0.150359130593 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0810146552109 0.0667264976115 121% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 14.1392134831 73% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 48.8420337079 130% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 12.1743820225 69% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.37 12.1639044944 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.77 8.38706741573 93% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 100.480337079 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.2143820225 75% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.7820224719 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.

Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, well, for example, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this: