We venerate loyalty-to schools,employers,friends-as a virtue.Loyalty,however,can be as detrimental an influence as it can be a beneficial one.
The statement states that we extend are loyalty to those we feel sense of belonging, however this virtual can be beneficial as well as detrimental. I agree with the opinion.
Being loyal and faithful is a human quality and nature which we maintain to our friends, school, employers and institutions. we demonstrate this conduct as we feel are closely tied to each of these relationship. we believe these are ‘our’. Thus, we often tend to put ourselves on second priority while these on first. there are several positive attributes associated with the action. however, there is darker side to it well.
this compassion knits the two individuals closely together. they invest into the bond to make it stronger. but if one of the partner has dubious intentions, s/he will take advantage of the other while the other will easily fall in the trap. For instance, in an institution of marriage, husband and wife respect each and ensure they maintain each other’s trust and enable building the basic structure of the society-family. but if the wife has intensions to use her acquire wealth for an extravagant lifestyle, she might start building her own financial statements and later disown her husband when he runs short on cash.
Due to loyalty, people often think ethically and try to build an environment where betterment both the parties and concerned. but this, often leads to the one of two eventually bearing the damage if the other reconsider priorities. if a person employed a corporate A is offered by another cooperate B, might decline the lucrative offer as his employer has recently invested in him by sending him to attend some international workshops for enhancing his skills. but some years down the road, during the recession senior management may not think twice before declaring his position redundant and ending the contract with him.
loyalty lead a person to exhibit selfness. but this feeling later emotion drain the person if the same actions are not reciprocated toward her. Consider, young girl investing her time and energy to buckle up her friend during her difficult situation. she might be spending hours with the friend instead of working to improve a skill or earn extra money through some part-time job. later, when the girl is need of support, not finding her once friendly mate, she would loose trust in friendship and may not later extend such care for anyone else.
when are tag to any place, we try to keep its faults to ourselves as sense of loyalty. but intentionally or unintentionally, we may portray it wrong image for the society and it leads to disadvantage of others. if a renowned graduate school’s education standards dropped at certain point in time, it graduates will always to dust of its flaw under the carpet and will always speak highly of. this may lead to someone taking their word of mouth seriously and get admitted to the same college with expectation different from reality to get a shock at later stage.
Loyal is virtue and a conduct which maintains different bond and strengthen relationships. Even though, it has various benefits attached to it, it may result in loss for one of the parties or other around them.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, may, second, so, then, thus, well, while, for instance, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.5258426966 72% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.4196629213 121% => OK
Conjunction : 26.0 14.8657303371 175% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 57.0 33.0505617978 172% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 68.0 58.6224719101 116% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 12.9106741573 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2688.0 2235.4752809 120% => OK
No of words: 536.0 442.535393258 121% => OK
Chars per words: 5.01492537313 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.81161862636 4.55969084622 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76845555853 2.79657885939 99% => OK
Unique words: 308.0 215.323595506 143% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.574626865672 0.4932671777 116% => OK
syllable_count: 818.1 704.065955056 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 6.24550561798 240% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.77640449438 338% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.2370786517 138% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 52.8345511566 60.3974514979 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.0 118.986275619 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1428571429 23.4991977007 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.25 5.21951772744 62% => OK
Paragraphs: 7.0 4.97078651685 141% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 22.0 7.80617977528 282% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 10.2758426966 185% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.149766699083 0.243740707755 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0359597067685 0.0831039109588 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.049164708722 0.0758088955206 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0760970776698 0.150359130593 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0681767896521 0.0667264976115 102% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 14.1392134831 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 48.8420337079 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.1743820225 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 12.1639044944 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.41 8.38706741573 100% => OK
difficult_words: 130.0 100.480337079 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 11.8971910112 50% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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