The well-being of a society is enhanced when many of its people question authority.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
There are different development stages for a society and I would say one of key driving forces to lead the progress of the society is citizens’ ability to question authority. However, I am also aware that questioning authority doesn’t necessarily result in an increase of the general well-being, in that only relevant actions are being taken can truly improve people’s living standard which I will explain further as follows.
First, it is common to see from the history that dramatic changes of a society normally stem from revolutions, which start from a group of people questioning authorities’ behaviors, such as the French revolution in the 18 century and led further collapse of the royal family. Therefore, I have no doubt that questioning authority is one of ways to disrupt the social norms at that time. However, what I disagree is that questioning authority itself can only stimulate changes, but can’t guarantee the changes go in a positive direction, which means enhancing the well-being in that society. This disconnection between questioning authority and the increase of well-being can easily be demonstrated from Chinese revolution after the second world war, which also manifested by the group who was against the dominant governmental party back then, and established the Mao government afterwards. Nonetheless, what followed was not the victory of people, actually was the serious famine in Chinese history. Thus, I disagree with the part that questioning authority can directly enhance well-being. Alternatively, I would argue that the sequential mechanisms after the question could truly decide whether the social well-being is improved or damaged.
Second, the definition of well-being of a society can be diverse according to the social conditions. Indeed, well-being in normal and emergent social conditions, such as the recent global pandemic, actually rely on various relations with the authority. For example, during the pandemic, it is important for people to follow the authority to avoid further spread of the virus. In contrast, if people start questioning authority, it will be truly challenging to stop the virus. Just like what has happened in the US, that citizens demonstrated and were against the lockdown of the city, actually make the government challenging to impose effective mechanisms to decrease the spread, and may reversely damage the general well-being of the society.
To sum up, the following actions after questioning authority and different conditions of a society can impact the result of the final improved or harmful well-being. Therefore, the critical element is not questioning authority itself to enhance the social well-being.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...ctually make the government challenging to impose effective mechanisms to decrease the sp...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, however, if, may, nonetheless, second, so, then, therefore, thus, well, for example, in contrast, no doubt, such as, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 19.5258426966 138% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.4196629213 105% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 14.8657303371 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.3162921348 133% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 33.0505617978 73% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 58.6224719101 94% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 12.9106741573 101% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2287.0 2235.4752809 102% => OK
No of words: 418.0 442.535393258 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.47129186603 5.05705443957 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52162009685 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01952260619 2.79657885939 108% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 215.323595506 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.507177033493 0.4932671777 103% => OK
syllable_count: 702.0 704.065955056 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.2370786517 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 23.0359550562 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 69.5384055307 60.3974514979 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 142.9375 118.986275619 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.125 23.4991977007 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.625 5.21951772744 184% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.245812313447 0.243740707755 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0919987284473 0.0831039109588 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0455408781396 0.0758088955206 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.159077544891 0.150359130593 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0313678415224 0.0667264976115 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.4 14.1392134831 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.63 48.8420337079 75% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 12.1743820225 120% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.74 12.1639044944 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.89 8.38706741573 106% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 100.480337079 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 11.8971910112 160% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.2143820225 111% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.7820224719 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 70.83 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.25 Out of 6
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