Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?The ability to maintain friendships with a small number of people over a long period of time is more important for happiness than the ability to make many new friends
The study has suggested that we can only maintain about less than ten close friends through out our lives and this is why I do agree with the statement. Also, I feel this way for two other reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, I believe that the true happiness lies in the deep connection with other people and this is easier to achieve when we have the ability to cultivate friendships with a small number of friends. My personal experience is a compelling example. When I started my college life, I was enthusiastic about making new friends. I have participated in lots of student clubs and had parties all the time. However, after one semester, I realized the friends I have met, I don’t really know them well since there were just simply too many people I have talked to but without any deep and meaningful interaction. I suddenly understood that though I have many people to speak with but no real connection has been built up and that was the moment I have started to invest in deep friendships with just a few people and afterwards, I find the interaction satisfying and rewarding.
Furthermore, another aspect of happiness comes from that we are being supported whenever we are in a need. This kind of timely support is also easier to acquire when we have deep connection with other people. Take my cousin as an example. He has more than one thousand facebook friends, but when he was sick and unable to participate in the final exam, he couldn’t find anyone to help him since those facebook friends are only virtual friends without deep connection. Therefore, only when we have real contact with others, can we build the deep connection that is essential to provide the support whenever we are under a difficult condition. This kind of real contact is more possible to maintain when the number of people we interact with is small. Otherwise, all the contact will become superficial since we simply don’t have sufficient time to interact with everyone.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that the ability to maintain friendships lasting for long time with a small group of people is more important to achieve happiness. This is because this ability helps to create deep connections with each other and further nurture the friendships to provide the support whenever we are needed. And these two elements – deep connection and being supported are essential to real happiness.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, really, so, therefore, thus, well, i feel, in conclusion, kind of, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1977.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 416.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.75240384615 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51620172871 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55049662868 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 212.727598566 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.449519230769 0.524837075471 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 621.9 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 9.59856630824 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 1.0 20.6003584229 5% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 416.0 20.1344086022 2066% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 0.0 48.9658058833 0% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 1977.0 100.406767564 1969% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 416.0 20.6045352989 2019% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 117.0 5.45110844103 2146% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 11.8709677419 8% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.316566699496 0.236089414692 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.316566699496 0.076458572812 414% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.211134071132 0.150856017488 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0577110085156 0.0645574589148 89% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 208.9 11.7677419355 1775% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -342.3 58.1214874552 -589% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 0.0 6.10430107527 0% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 164.3 10.1575268817 1618% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 11.75 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 26.78 8.01818996416 334% => Dale chall readability score is high.
difficult_words: 66.0 86.8835125448 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 53.0 10.002688172 530% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 168.4 10.0537634409 1675% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 27.0 10.247311828 263% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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