“What society has thought to be its greatest social, political, and individual achievements have often resulted in the greatest discontent.”
An achievement in any field is not possible without the support from society. Society has always acted as a driving force for people to make achievements in various fields. Society has always been benefited from the achievements in any front be it social, political, and individual achievements. It is true that some times some achievements have had fatal results but we can certainly not say that they have often resulted in discontent in society. The discontent can not be entirely blamed on achievements as it entirely depends of humans how they perceive an achievement. Therefore, we can not solely blame achievements for discontentment in the society rather those humans are to be blamed who misuse any achievement.
Every aspect in life can be viewed as correct or incorrect. What might be correct for one person can be incorrect for another. There is nothing wrong in this change in perception as we all humans have a tendency to think differently. There is nothing wrong if humans think differently but perception if led to a wrong direction can certainly prove to be fatal. We all use knife for cutting vegetables but the same knife is used by a killer to stab people. It is not the invention or the inventor of the knife who is wrong but the person who misuses such a remarkable invention. Similarly, when man could make use of nuclear energy it revolutionized the whole scientific world. There were people who misused this greatest invention to create nuclear bombs and weapons. It is certainly not the achievement in the field of science where nuclear energy was developed but the misuse of that energy that brought discontent in the society. Therefore, it is not any achievement that has made the society discontented but the use of that achievement in a wrong way.
Although some achievements might have caused discontentment in the society but there are numerous achievements which have helped society in all the possible ways. One such achievement was in the field of education. All the achievements in this field have made people stand on their feet. It is only through education that different cultures of the world are interacting with each other. Education has made each one of us true human beings as without it we were as good as animals. Achievements in the field of medical science have also helped the society. Our medical science has developed so much that nothing seems to be impossible. We are able to cure the deadliest of diseases. The various medications and operation procedures have helped in increasing the life expectancy of a man.
Therefore, it would not be correct to say that all achievements cause discontentment to the society. All the achievements in various fields are made to help the society but if these achievements are misused then certainly they provide discontentment to the society. It depends on us how we make the best possible use of all the achievements.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 1042, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a wrong way" with adverb for "wrong"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, similarly, so, then, therefore, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 30.0 19.5258426966 154% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.3162921348 141% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 33.0505617978 118% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 58.6224719101 94% => OK
Nominalization: 24.0 12.9106741573 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2429.0 2235.4752809 109% => OK
No of words: 490.0 442.535393258 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.95714285714 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70488508055 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97224492598 2.79657885939 106% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 215.323595506 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.391836734694 0.4932671777 79% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 788.4 704.065955056 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 6.24550561798 176% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.38483146067 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.2370786517 138% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 23.0359550562 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.2050486388 60.3974514979 55% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 86.75 118.986275619 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5 23.4991977007 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.03571428571 5.21951772744 39% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 13.0 4.83258426966 269% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.265904950738 0.243740707755 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0706539250245 0.0831039109588 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0605200874865 0.0758088955206 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.161045547293 0.150359130593 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0590324865518 0.0667264976115 88% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 14.1392134831 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 48.8420337079 111% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.19 12.1639044944 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.09 8.38706741573 85% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 100.480337079 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.8971910112 88% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.2143820225 78% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.