Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
The goal of technological advancement is something that society has been discussing for years. These discussions have increased with the advent of smartphones and increased speeds in internet speeds. Technological advancement increases people's efficiency and gives people more leisure time. However increase leisure time can negatively effect society since people become lazier and have more time to create more problems with increases in leisure time.
More leisure time from technological advances causes people to become lazier. Being lazier creates a lot of problems for society. One example is seen in the increase in overweight people in society. The obsetity rate in the United States has tripled in the past fifty years and this corresponds with increases in leisure time as a result the techonological advances over the time period. The increase in people who are overweight costs the society millions in dollars in health care costs. Increased leisure time causes laziness in a society.
More leisure time leads to people enaging in activities that do not help society. Increased leisure time can give people more oppurnity to enage in risky behavior. One behavior that is directly effected by an increase in leisure time is drinking and driving. People are dying from drunking drivings at a rate of 24 people per day. When people have more leisure time, they are more likely to drink. With the increased likelyhood of them drinking, there is greater probability of them driving drunk. This would increase the rate of people dying from drunk drivers. People enage in activities that to do not help society when they are given increased leisure time from technological advances.
Techological advances create many good things for society. The primary goal of these advances are being debated. The primary goal fo these advances should not be create more leisure time for people through increasing the efficiency of each worker. By increasing leisure time, people become increasely lazier and more likely to enage in activities that create problems for society.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...hrough increasing the efficiency of each worker. By increasing leisure time, peop...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, so, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.5258426966 72% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 12.4196629213 32% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 14.8657303371 40% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 14.0 33.0505617978 42% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 58.6224719101 82% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 12.9106741573 15% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1751.0 2235.4752809 78% => OK
No of words: 328.0 442.535393258 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.33841463415 5.05705443957 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25567506705 4.55969084622 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65559631264 2.79657885939 95% => OK
Unique words: 140.0 215.323595506 65% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.426829268293 0.4932671777 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 572.4 704.065955056 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.2370786517 109% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 23.0359550562 61% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.5144016882 60.3974514979 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 79.5909090909 118.986275619 67% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.9090909091 23.4991977007 63% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.27272727273 5.21951772744 24% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 5.13820224719 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0226398700875 0.243740707755 9% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0111048090245 0.0831039109588 13% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0153602459498 0.0758088955206 20% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.020755084069 0.150359130593 14% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0121881860734 0.0667264976115 18% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 14.1392134831 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 48.81 48.8420337079 100% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.1 12.1639044944 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.46 8.38706741573 89% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 100.480337079 65% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 11.8971910112 50% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.6 11.2143820225 68% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.7820224719 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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