Write a response in which you discuss your views on the policy and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider the possible consequences of implementing the policy and explain how these consequences shape your position.
Students must be required to spend at least six months studying in a foreign country.
In today's exceedingly competitive world, education is of utmost importance and graduating fields, which are currently being pursued throughout the world and closely align with one's own interests is most likely to set one up for lucrative job opportunities and career prospects. The prompt suggests that in order for this to be applicable to a large enough sample size of students, they should be required to spend atleast six months studying in a foreign country. For a student, who is passionate about a particular subject or field, he or she always finds a way to learn more about the field to make him or her more attractive in terms of career opportunities. Hence, I mostly disagree with the above prompt for two reasons.
First of all, studying in a foreign country is very expensive, which cannot be afforded by everyone even when, they receive a scholarship. Students who come from economically challenged backgrounds would find such a requirement to be extremely stringent in terms of completing their education since, they also have to earn and support their families. For instance, students from economically challenged backgrounds in India, receive a tuituon fee discount in State run colleges along with other types of scholarships commensurate with their academic performance. If such a policy is implemented, then these students will likely be scrouging and struggling to put together funds, so as to complete this requirement and receive their degrees. Some students are likely to drop out in view of such a policy being implemented, as they will have to sell a lot of their family belongings, their homes, etc. to come up with these funds and these students will lose out on an opportunity for a better future. This example illustrates the fact that, implementing such a policy is likely to be deleterious to students who are eonomically challenged.
Secondly, in the era of internet and globalization, distance learning and freelance educators, who teach students for nominal fees through Youtube, Massive Open Online Course (MOOC), etc. are becoming quite popular. In addition to this, a lot of educational material in the form of books and research papers are available on the Internet. Universities have also started distance learning programmes, at a nominal fee which provides students with the same education in an online mode and at a cheaper cost. For instance, a lot of the courses taught by the professors of MIT and other Ivy league institutions are available on platforms such as eDX, Coursera, etc. at a nominal cost and sometimes the colleges in which students are enrolled provide a campus-wide access to these courses free of cost. Such schemes, have led to a quality and world class education being delivered to students without them having to travel to a foreign country. This example illustrates, that students can receive the same education without them having to travel to foreign countries.
However, if students are able to afford the cost of studying in a foreign country for six months, then they should be required to do so as it would likey help them in securing a better future and can be thought of as an investment for a better tomorrow. But, this is not the case with most students, as most of them, even if they can afford the costs, have to worry about other problems such as, living in a foreign country alone and with no family there to help them, it can be a daunting challenge and they might struggle to cope with and adjust to their new environments. I would like to conclude that such a policy should not be introduced as an obligation, but as a choice.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 680, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...g and struggling to put together funds, so as to complete this requirement and receive t...
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Line 3, column 1108, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a are'.
Suggestion: who is a are
...is likely to be deleterious to students who are eonomically challenged. Secondly, in...
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Line 5, column 464, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in an online mode" with adverb for "online"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...ovides students with the same education in an online mode and at a cheaper cost. For instance, a ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, however, if, second, secondly, so, then, as to, for instance, in addition, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 19.5258426966 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.4196629213 121% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 14.8657303371 148% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 33.0505617978 124% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 97.0 58.6224719101 165% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 12.9106741573 139% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3013.0 2235.4752809 135% => OK
No of words: 608.0 442.535393258 137% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.95559210526 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.9656475924 4.55969084622 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86653756895 2.79657885939 103% => OK
Unique words: 287.0 215.323595506 133% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.472039473684 0.4932671777 96% => OK
syllable_count: 945.0 704.065955056 134% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 6.24550561798 192% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.2370786517 109% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 23.0359550562 117% => OK
Sentence length SD: 65.6584104247 60.3974514979 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 136.954545455 118.986275619 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.6363636364 23.4991977007 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.5 5.21951772744 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0660301933982 0.243740707755 27% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0252311674763 0.0831039109588 30% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0212090929736 0.0758088955206 28% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0436466588532 0.150359130593 29% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0158352583984 0.0667264976115 24% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 14.1392134831 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 48.8420337079 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.1743820225 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 12.1639044944 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.43 8.38706741573 101% => OK
difficult_words: 133.0 100.480337079 132% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 11.8971910112 160% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 11.2143820225 114% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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