Young people should be encouraged to pursue long-term, realistic goals rather than seek immediate fame and recognition.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.
Slow and steady wins the race, is a proverb know to all and practiced by not so many, If you ask me, i would say it does work and works well in all walks of life. Young people have alacrity to get fame and recognition in the society quickly and easily, this can lead to mishaps and failures in their life which may be overcome so easily, and can also haunt them for the rest of their life. So young-lings should rather focus on short term goals and spreading positivity in the society, rather than thinking about fame and recognition, which may tunnel vision them and disallow young ones to reach their set goal.
Focusing ones attention on just fame and recognition can lead to tunnel visioning of the task at hand, one should do the task assigned to him without thinking of secondary aspects like money, fame, recognition: they should solely be focused on the main objective of the task. If one finds this taxing they should plan about short term goals which can help them achieve the final goal eventually, these short term goals should be realistic and doable in the set time given for it. Having unrealistic goals can cause failure and de-motivation, and drive one towards demons of fame which leads one to no where in life. One can argue fame can act as a driving force for young people to pursue their goals, but as one achieves it they realize how hollow it is.
Youth can be helped in setting long term goals by their teachers and parents, helping them draw a roadmap to their success, the elders can guide them step by step and help in formulating short term goals and eventually the final goal in mind. This way the youth can be guided into a safe future. These short-goals should be spread over a period of time and not be seeked hurriedly by the student. This will enable a proper plan for a successful future, leading to fame and recognition wit it.
Young ones should be preached about setting short term doable goals, rather than long term unrealistic goals, and told to work on what is hand and enjoy the satisfaction they get for every small task fulfilled rather than running behind fame and recognition. Fame and recognition can eventually be achieved via hard work and consistency in everyday life.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...racticed by not so many, If you ask me, i would say it does work and works well i...
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Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...es to reach their set goal. Focusing ones attention on just fame and recognition ...
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Message: Did you mean 'now' (=at this moment) instead of 'no' (negation)?
Suggestion: now
...wards demons of fame which leads one to no where in life. One can argue fame can a...
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Suggestion: period
...ese short-goals should be spread over a period of time and not be seeked hurriedly by the stud...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, second, so, well
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.5258426966 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 22.0 12.4196629213 177% => OK
Conjunction : 25.0 14.8657303371 168% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.3162921348 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 33.0505617978 91% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 58.6224719101 77% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 12.9106741573 77% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1832.0 2235.4752809 82% => OK
No of words: 397.0 442.535393258 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.61460957179 5.05705443957 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46372701284 4.55969084622 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.35962212201 2.79657885939 84% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 215.323595506 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.491183879093 0.4932671777 100% => OK
syllable_count: 552.6 704.065955056 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 4.38483146067 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.2370786517 64% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 23.0359550562 130% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 69.7265156325 60.3974514979 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 140.923076923 118.986275619 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.5384615385 23.4991977007 130% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.76923076923 5.21951772744 53% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.263032217457 0.243740707755 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.105147984449 0.0831039109588 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0535151633931 0.0758088955206 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.177341262383 0.150359130593 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.022989217644 0.0667264976115 34% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 14.1392134831 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.95 48.8420337079 119% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 12.1743820225 103% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.05 12.1639044944 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.95 8.38706741573 95% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 100.480337079 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 11.8971910112 151% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 11.2143820225 125% => OK
text_standard: 18.0 11.7820224719 153% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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