Young people should be encouraged to pursue long-term, realistic goals rather than seek immediate fame and recognition.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.
Young people are the future of the nation, so showing right path to them is the duty of all the surrounding elders because by the guidance they will not deviate from their path. I mostly agree with the above statement that young people should be encouraged to pursue long term goals and realistic goals rather than seeking for immediate fame and recognition. I will explain my point with 2 reasons.
As we see in today’s world surrounded social media, the desire of the young ones to gain immediate fame and success is increasing. Everyone wants to be rich and successful very fast. One of the biggest reasons for this is social media. Because many false things are shown on the social media platform. And because of that young people are running behind instant fame and success. For example, someone who watches YouTube videos inspires to become a YouTube content creator and then he starts to make his own videos regarding something. But when he doesn’t get instant recognization from public it leads to depression. But the thing is even the YouTube content creator had to work for many years to get recognization and to achieve their goal.
Secondly, the success and fame achieved in shot time span doesn’t last long. Because one should be experienced in that field so that he knows the ways to tackle the problems faced. And one will only be able to do this when he aims for long term goals and takes small steps to achieve this. Because when he takes small steps he will be aware of all the pros and cons in that particular area and then he will be able to tackle difficult situations easily. For example, someone who starts a manufacturing workshop and aims for big contracts instead of small ones in the early years of his work because he might face problem will completing those contracts due to lack of experience. If instead he would have started from smaller contracts then he would have gained knowledge about the contracts and then gradually increased the size of the contracts.
But in some areas, I think instant fame is necessary. For example, in the acting profession you have to perform well in your debut film. Because if you don’t then there are less chances that you will get new films to work.
At last I will conclude by saying the one show always target for long term and realistic goals because immediate fame is not for long time and the success gained from long term goals last long.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 236, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ggest reasons for this is social media. Because many false things are shown on the soci...
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Line 3, column 627, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'complete'
Suggestion: complete
...work because he might face problem will completing those contracts due to lack of experien...
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Line 3, column 695, Rule ID: IF_WOULD_HAVE_VBN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'had started'?
Suggestion: had started
...ue to lack of experience. If instead he would have started from smaller contracts then he would ha...
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Line 4, column 173, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun chances is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...lm. Because if you don’t then there are less chances that you will get new films to ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, regarding, second, secondly, so, then, well, for example, i think
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.5258426966 82% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.4196629213 105% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 14.8657303371 135% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 33.0505617978 112% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 58.6224719101 84% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 12.9106741573 46% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1999.0 2235.4752809 89% => OK
No of words: 426.0 442.535393258 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.69248826291 5.05705443957 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54310108192 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.37965308254 2.79657885939 85% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 215.323595506 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.488262910798 0.4932671777 99% => OK
syllable_count: 599.4 704.065955056 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.77640449438 281% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.1386327046 60.3974514979 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.1904761905 118.986275619 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2857142857 23.4991977007 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.52380952381 5.21951772744 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.243556211333 0.243740707755 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.077530245736 0.0831039109588 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.099768120537 0.0758088955206 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.165283585928 0.150359130593 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0908801579642 0.0667264976115 136% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 14.1392134831 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 48.8420337079 139% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 12.1743820225 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.92 12.1639044944 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.48 8.38706741573 89% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 100.480337079 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.8971910112 88% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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