Schools should cut funding for extracurricular activities such as sports and the arts when school buildings are in need of repair.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with this recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and sup porting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.
Schools play an important role in a person’s life. They help a person for overall development and guide him or her in the right direction. So when I say that it helps a person in overall development so I mean to say that he or she should be good in both studies as well as extracurricular activities. Schools provide the base for developing interest in these activities. So, I disagree with statement that schools should cut funding for extracurricular activities such as sports etc when school buildings are in need of repair.
As I mentioned earlier that school play an important role in overall development of a student.
Activities such as sports help a person to be physically fit and also by playing sports he or she will also become mentally active and fit. Even parents send their children to school for overall development. So what they expect from school is to make their child good in studies as well as in extracurricular activities. So cut the funding for extracurricular activities will not be a good idea.
Secondly, extracurricular activities such as sports, arts etc help a person to find this field of interest other than studies. So anyone who wants to nurture his skills he can do it with the help of these funding. So when the funding is cut off then this will affect the training of that particular person and will lead to his downfall. Because due cut off of the funding the resources for training will get decreased. For example :- a cricket player wants to buy a cricket kit for training but due to funding cut off we was not able to buy it and this will affect his training and lead to poor performance in the cricket competitions.
So I would like to conclude by saying that. Schools help a person for overall development and guide him or her in the right direction. So when I say that it helps a person in overall development so I mean to say that he or she should be good in both studies as well as extracurricular activities. Schools provide the base for developing interest in these activities. So, cutting funds of extracurricular activity is a bad idea.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 263, Rule ID: BOTH_AS_WELL_AS[1]
Message: Probable usage error. Use 'and' after 'both'.
Suggestion: and
...e or she should be good in both studies as well as extracurricular activities. Schools pro...
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Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ool buildings are in need of repair. As I mentioned earlier that school play an...
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Line 8, column 259, Rule ID: BOTH_AS_WELL_AS[1]
Message: Probable usage error. Use 'and' after 'both'.
Suggestion: and
...e or she should be good in both studies as well as extracurricular activities. Schools pro...
^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, second, secondly, so, then, well, for example, i mean, such as, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 19.5258426966 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 33.0505617978 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 58.6224719101 73% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 12.9106741573 77% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1732.0 2235.4752809 77% => OK
No of words: 370.0 442.535393258 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.68108108108 5.05705443957 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38581623665 4.55969084622 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95674677299 2.79657885939 106% => OK
Unique words: 143.0 215.323595506 66% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.386486486486 0.4932671777 78% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 526.5 704.065955056 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 6.24550561798 32% => OK
Article: 0.0 4.99550561798 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.38483146067 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 43.7891253624 60.3974514979 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.6 118.986275619 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5 23.4991977007 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.45 5.21951772744 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.246658122566 0.243740707755 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0983599835851 0.0831039109588 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0982006068022 0.0758088955206 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.152901061736 0.150359130593 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0700140387619 0.0667264976115 105% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 14.1392134831 70% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 48.8420337079 144% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 12.1743820225 65% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.86 12.1639044944 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.45 8.38706741573 77% => OK
difficult_words: 45.0 100.480337079 45% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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