Young people should be encouraged to pursue long-term, realistic goals rather than seek immediate fame and recognition.
The writer argues that it is vital to encourage youths to follow the realistic and log-term aims rather than the immediate fame and recognition. This is a claim with which I generally agree. In fact there are lists of assumptions all of which give support to my favorable attitude. In the following paragraphs I will delve into the most conspicuous ones to illustrate my perspective.
The first reason, which gives adherence to my idea, is that long-term goals lead the young people to become patient. As a matter of fact, in the real life anything requires a sufficient and sophisticated span to render its ultimate outcome. This presentation sometimes demands a long duration which merely the people who are patient enough can achieve it. On the other hand the majority of the young people, based upon their lifestyle and askew to the velocity, prefer everything occur in the short period and to be accessible whenever they prefer to possess it. According to the noteworthy, intelligent statistic released by the survey conducted in our country, approximately 75 percent of youths in our country are willing to be fast and prefer to occupy their goals in the short duration. Consequently, by encouraging the young people to pursue the long-term goals they will have an opportunity to get prepare for the real life and its experiences.
The second exquisite reason, which advocates my viewpoint, is that the chance of the immediate fame and recognition in the practical try is too scanty. In fact, among the bulks of population in the society solely 10 percent of the people can be considered as the famous people. In consequence, in the case which all the youth range of society are inclined to become well-known person, it will be an arduous competition with an unguaranteed result which lonely 10 percent of them will achieve their concerned aim. The rests who do not acquire their desires will miss their ordinary stands in the society; since, all their efforts are allocated in the reaching a vague aim.
Nonetheless, what I alluded to in the two paragraphs of body should not be overgeneralized. The subtle point which should not underestimate is the importance of the imagination. Indeed, the imagination has an undeniable impact in the society's enhancement. If the people did not pursue their imagination, which in the first glance of that time considered as the far-fetched goals, the society does have no equipment and improvement which it possesses now. However, these imagination should be evaluated logically and pursued based upon the well-organized scheme till depicts its decent outcomes; otherwise, it will be abortive task without the expected results.
To wrap it up, all aforementioned reasons and examples lead us to the conclusion that although the imagination has an important influence in the humanities' enhancement, as was stated the young people with the long-term and realistic aims are well-prepared for the realistic life and its demand. Actually, there are the lists of evidences which confirm the accuracy of viewpoint which are not mentioned above. However, the most conspicuous ones are depicted to illustrate the validity of my perspective.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 465, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this imagination' or 'these imaginations'?
Suggestion: this imagination; these imaginations
...vement which it possesses now. However, these imagination should be evaluated logically and pursu...
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Line 9, column 146, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'humanities'' or 'humanity's'?
Suggestion: humanities'; humanity's
...ation has an important influence in the humanities enhancement, as was stated the young pe...
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Discourse Markers used:
['actually', 'consequently', 'first', 'however', 'if', 'nonetheless', 'second', 'so', 'well', 'in fact', 'as a matter of fact', 'on the other hand']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.213780918728 0.240241500013 89% => OK
Verbs: 0.144876325088 0.157235817809 92% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0989399293286 0.0880659088768 112% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0459363957597 0.0497285424764 92% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0565371024735 0.0444667217837 127% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.104240282686 0.12292977631 85% => OK
Participles: 0.0265017667845 0.0406280797675 65% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.98066247207 2.79330140395 107% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0353356890459 0.030933414821 114% => OK
Particles: 0.0017667844523 0.0016655270985 106% => OK
Determiners: 0.128975265018 0.0997080785238 129% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0194346289753 0.0249443105267 78% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.030035335689 0.0148568991511 202% => Maybe 'Which' is overused. If other WH_determiners like 'Who, What, Whom, Whose...' are used too in sentences, then there are no issues.
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3185.0 2732.02544248 117% => OK
No of words: 518.0 452.878318584 114% => OK
Chars per words: 6.14864864865 6.0361032391 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.77070365392 4.58838876751 104% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.372586872587 0.366273622748 102% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.283783783784 0.280924506359 101% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.220077220077 0.200843997647 110% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.169884169884 0.132149295362 129% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98066247207 2.79330140395 107% => OK
Unique words: 260.0 219.290929204 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.501930501931 0.48968727796 103% => OK
Word variations: 59.7403949873 55.4138127331 108% => OK
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6194690265 107% => OK
Sentence length: 23.5454545455 23.380412469 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.2224526373 59.4972553346 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 144.772727273 141.124799967 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5454545455 23.380412469 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.545454545455 0.674092028746 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.94800884956 101% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.21349557522 38% => OK
Readability: 51.9238329238 51.4728631049 101% => OK
Elegance: 1.39285714286 1.64882698954 84% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.181021735683 0.391690518653 46% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.121040562093 0.123202303941 98% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0676337345641 0.077325440228 87% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.592231954552 0.547984918172 108% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.134619453846 0.149214159877 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0818102314186 0.161403998019 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0766577701225 0.0892212321368 86% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.542913345897 0.385218514788 141% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0271333000798 0.0692045440612 39% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.133641299863 0.275328986314 49% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0555384808496 0.0653680567796 85% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.4325221239 105% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.30420353982 38% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88274336283 184% => Less neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 5.0 7.22455752212 69% => OK
Negative topic words: 1.0 3.66592920354 27% => More negative topic words wanted.
Neutral topic words: 7.0 2.70907079646 258% => OK
Total topic words: 13.0 13.5995575221 96% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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