Young people should be encouraged to pursue long-term, realistic goals rather than seek immediate fame and recognition.

Essay topics:

Young people should be encouraged to pursue long-term, realistic goals rather than seek immediate fame and recognition.

The speaker suggests that youth should be educated to approach a long-term and practical goal rather than pursue immediate fame and recognition. In my view, this statement is a right reference for the youth. Due to amount of successful cases, people who can be patient enough to seek realistic goals will attach the highest level in their field.

Fame and recognition may be seemed as a success to the youth, while in the business field, insisting on seeking the long-term and rational goal during the youth is more important. Jack Ma, for example, when he viewed the power of the internet in 1990s, he decided to introduce an online shopping platform to mainland China. He was around thirty years old when he made the determination and did not give up his idea until he constructed the biggest online shopping platform in China twenty years later. Nowadays, he receives a lot of fame and recognition around the whole world. However, fame is just an accessory, the begin of all these benefits is his long-term ambition. Upon many of his interviews, he always tells the young entrepreneur that establishing a final and pragmatic target and stick to the dream is the most efficient way for the youth.

Although popularity is an important determinant to evaluate actors, they also should consider enhancing their technical skills and complete more impressed movies. First, young actors should pay more attention to promote their professional skills rather than focus on attracting more fans. Peng Yuchang, a young actor who has been selected as a candidate for Golden Horse Prize, always says that he needs to learn more technical skills from experienced actors and directors without mentioning lack of fans during the interviews. Second, excellent works should be the purpose of young actors since products/performances are the only thing that the audience will depend on to memorize one actor. Jackie Chan has declined the number/frequency of shooting movies recent years, but the audience still remembers and praises/acclaims him for his amount of successful and impressed movies since last century, most of which are completed when he was a new young actor appearing in this industry.

Votes
Average: 5 (1 vote)
Essay Categories

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 244, Rule ID: IN_1990s[1]
Message: The article is probably missing here: 'in the 1990s'.
Suggestion: in the 1990s
...hen he viewed the power of the internet in 1990s, he decided to introduce an online shop...
^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 615, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...ld. However, fame is just an accessory, the begin of all these benefits is his long-term ...
^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, may, second, so, still, while, for example, in my view

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.5258426966 77% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 33.0505617978 79% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 58.6224719101 70% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 12.9106741573 77% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1837.0 2235.4752809 82% => OK
No of words: 357.0 442.535393258 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.14565826331 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34677393335 4.55969084622 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85948165933 2.79657885939 102% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 215.323595506 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.588235294118 0.4932671777 119% => OK
syllable_count: 549.0 704.065955056 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.2370786517 69% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 23.0359550562 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.331564599 60.3974514979 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.214285714 118.986275619 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.5 23.4991977007 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.78571428571 5.21951772744 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.97078651685 60% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 5.13820224719 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.272892060725 0.243740707755 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0965237535053 0.0831039109588 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.128941434671 0.0758088955206 170% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.213568704499 0.150359130593 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.149096824492 0.0667264976115 223% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 14.1392134831 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 48.8420337079 112% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.89 12.1639044944 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.9 8.38706741573 106% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 100.480337079 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.8971910112 88% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.2143820225 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

---------------------
Minimum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.