Young people should be encouraged to pursue long-term, realistic goals rather than seek immediate fame and recognition.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
The author says that the young people should be encouraged to pursue long-term goal rather than seek immediate fame and recognition. However, the term "immediate" is very ambiguous here. There is no fame and recognition in the world that is immediate, behind every fame and glory there is an intense amount of hardwork. So why shall they not pursue it?
If we look at various professions where "famous" people exist, Sports is one of those few examples. A youngster might want to become a sports celebrity, and as we all know sports is an ephemeral career. However, a sports celebritiy has earned enough fame, recognition, respect from people and most importantly, money in the short span of mere fifteen years that by comparing it with some long-term goal doesn't hold any sense. Moreover, this fame is not immediate. For instance, Michael Jordan, one of the greatest basketball players in the entire world, has worked intensely and gone through many sleepless nights practising unlike most of the mediocre people to reach that status.
Yet another profession is ofcourse, the Movie Stars. They also go through immense struggle and hard work to acheive their goals. It is a well-known fact that many of the rich stars that we see today have gone through a period of great poverty living on a meagre salary while continuously trying to "get a break". No success is immediate, it's often how we perceive it as meteoric because we are not well aware of the other person's hardwork and dedication that he/she went through.
There is also a recent trend among the youngsters to pursue social media blogging as their career choice. Today, there is a sundry of bloggers over internet consisting of travelling bloggers, fitness bloggers, food bloggers and so many others. These people generally emerge from the middle-class families and after dedicating a huge amount of effort and time, they are able to gain some followers. This indeed gives them fame and recognition but it is also not immediate. It takes time to go from a mediocre status to the point where other mediocres are obsessed with knowing what he/she did entire day or when is the next blog coming up. During this time, they generally also go against their parents' wishes to put their academic careers on stake and follow their "dream" of becoming popular and many of them are able to acheive it too.
Hence, I would like to conclude that a person should pursue the career he/she wants to. There is no work in the world which does not require effort and hardwork. Every career demands a certain amount arduous work and great deal of time. When media says, XYZ became an overnight star, well it's overnight to public. Ask the star how many years it took for him or her.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 146, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'sports'' or 'sport's'?
Suggestion: sports'; sport's
...les. A youngster might want to become a sports celebrity, and as we all know sports is...
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Line 3, column 223, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a sport' or simply 'sports'?
Suggestion: a sport; sports
...sports is an ephemeral career. However, a sports celebritiy has earned enough fame, reco...
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Line 3, column 414, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...y comparing it with some long-term goal doesnt hold any sense. Moreover, this fame is ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, however, if, look, moreover, so, well, while, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.5258426966 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.4196629213 40% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 14.8657303371 135% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 33.0505617978 145% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 53.0 58.6224719101 90% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 12.9106741573 39% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2306.0 2235.4752809 103% => OK
No of words: 469.0 442.535393258 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.91684434968 5.05705443957 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65364457471 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70297558006 2.79657885939 97% => OK
Unique words: 265.0 215.323595506 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.565031982942 0.4932671777 115% => OK
syllable_count: 708.3 704.065955056 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 6.24550561798 160% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.2370786517 119% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 56.7997059607 60.3974514979 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.0833333333 118.986275619 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5416666667 23.4991977007 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.16666666667 5.21951772744 61% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.2758426966 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.144222919924 0.243740707755 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0435196349175 0.0831039109588 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.080874723453 0.0758088955206 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.093608540391 0.150359130593 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.102124299906 0.0667264976115 153% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 14.1392134831 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 48.8420337079 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.1743820225 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 12.1639044944 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.95 8.38706741573 95% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 100.480337079 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 11.8971910112 59% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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