The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010. Summarise the inforamtion by selectiong and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Essay topics:

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010. Summarise the inforamtion by selectiong and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The given bar chart illustrates the data about how many people in Australia did physical activity, on a daily basis in the percentage in the year 2010.
Overall, male age group experienced a downward trend, while female group showed an upward throughout the ages. Both countries' percentage had some fluctuations. Although, female initially had a lower rate, it outraced the age group of men at the end of the period.
Male's activity rate was quite more than a half in 15 to 24 age group, being higher that female's rate by approximately 5%. Then it fell to 42.2% in the next group. However, the figure should a gradual increase to 46.7% to the end of the period, hit a low-point of almost a four-tenth of the percentage in 35 to 44 age group.
Percentage of female activity was less than a half, initially, and it experienced a steady growth during the next 3 age groups. It rose to 53.3% at 45 to 54. However, the figure showed a decrease then to 47.1%, but outracing the rate of the male group in Australia.

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Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 116, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'countries'' or 'country's'?
Suggestion: countries'; country's
...wed an upward throughout the ages. Both countries percentage had some fluctuations. Altho...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, so, then, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 7.0 43% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 6.8 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.15609756098 32% => OK
Pronoun: 5.0 5.60731707317 89% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 33.7804878049 86% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 3.97073170732 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 830.0 965.302439024 86% => OK
No of words: 182.0 196.424390244 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.56043956044 4.92477711251 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.67297393991 3.73543355544 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68016999355 2.65546596893 101% => OK
Unique words: 107.0 106.607317073 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.587912087912 0.547539520022 107% => OK
syllable_count: 257.4 283.868780488 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.482926829268 414% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 3.36585365854 30% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 8.94146341463 112% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.4926829268 80% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 43.4423756256 43.030603864 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.0 112.824112599 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2 22.9334400587 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.9 5.23603664747 55% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.09268292683 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.196206255197 0.215688989381 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0731726745773 0.103423049105 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0401479377053 0.0843802449381 48% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.123801277926 0.15604864568 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0246581649671 0.0819641961636 30% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.1 13.2329268293 69% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 61.2550243902 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.3012195122 77% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.17 11.4140731707 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.83 8.06136585366 97% => OK
difficult_words: 38.0 40.7170731707 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.4329268293 74% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.9970731707 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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