the bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Essay topics:

the bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

The bar chart represents the share of Australian male and female group of people who did frequently physical activity in 2010. As a distinguishing quality, it can be clearly seen that 52.8 percent of young men between 15 to 24 years did physical activity regularly. Whereas, the highest share of three groups of women did constantly physical activity between 35 to 65 years, the maximum was 53.3 percent.
As it is shown by the graph, the proportion of women in five age groups did regularly physical activities more than men. The highest share were between 45 to 55 years, 53.3 percent to be exact. In the next ten years period the figure of active female in exercises were less to 0.3 percent, 53% precisely. The 42.2 percent of men groups between 25 to 35 age group did regularly exercises. After ten years the proportion female group decreased to 39.5 percent, but in the next 10 years period it grew.
A particular feature to highlight is that the all groups of people after 65 and over who did activity were approximately the same, 46.7% male and 47.1% of female group.

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 378, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'did' requires the base form of the verb: 'exercise'
Suggestion: exercise
...etween 25 to 35 age group did regularly exercises. After ten years the proportion female ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, whereas

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.0 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 6.8 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 5.0 5.60731707317 89% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 33.7804878049 92% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 891.0 965.302439024 92% => OK
No of words: 189.0 196.424390244 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.71428571429 4.92477711251 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.70779275107 3.73543355544 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57886442028 2.65546596893 97% => OK
Unique words: 98.0 106.607317073 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.518518518519 0.547539520022 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 261.9 283.868780488 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.33902439024 161% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.07073170732 280% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.4926829268 93% => OK
Sentence length SD: 27.6726901074 43.030603864 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.0 112.824112599 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0 22.9334400587 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.33333333333 5.23603664747 25% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 3.70975609756 162% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.353006923409 0.215688989381 164% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.168694874021 0.103423049105 163% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.133080091948 0.0843802449381 158% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.241852295109 0.15604864568 155% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0825159257557 0.0819641961636 101% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 13.2329268293 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 61.2550243902 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.3012195122 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.04 11.4140731707 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.35 8.06136585366 91% => OK
difficult_words: 32.0 40.7170731707 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.4329268293 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.9970731707 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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