The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Essay topics:

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

The presented bar chart compares the proportion of Australian genders who were busy on doing physical exercises taking into account their ages in 2010.

Looking at the chart, more males in their teenage years (15-24) tended to doing physical activity than females who were belong to that age group which corresponded 52.8% and 47.7% respectively. On the other hand, the proportion of males decreased gradually in mature periods. The figure changed 42.2% for men and 48.9% for in their 25-34 years, as well as, it was 39.5% for men and 52.5% for women in their 35 to 44 years.

Nevertheless, the late adulthood period, the number of men increase and obviously, less women did physical activity. The figure stood at 43.1% for men and 53.3% for women in their 45-54 years, and changed to 45.1% and 53% respectively in their 54-65 years. It should be noted that the percentage of old genders who did physical exercise nearly was the same account for 46.7% and 47.1%.

In conclusion, more men tended to doing physical exercises than women in their teenage years. The proportion of men decreased in mature years but it showed increase later however it was less than percentage of women. Genders reached the same proportion in their old ages.

Votes
Average: 6.1 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 119, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'belonged'.
Suggestion: belonged
...physical activity than females who were belong to that age group which corresponded 52...
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Line 5, column 84, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun women is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...e number of men increase and obviously, less women did physical activity. The figure...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, look, nevertheless, well, in conclusion, as well as, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.0 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 6.8 132% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 3.15609756098 190% => OK
Pronoun: 14.0 5.60731707317 250% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 27.0 33.7804878049 80% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.97073170732 101% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1033.0 965.302439024 107% => OK
No of words: 210.0 196.424390244 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.91904761905 4.92477711251 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.80675409584 3.73543355544 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46981321647 2.65546596893 93% => OK
Unique words: 107.0 106.607317073 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.509523809524 0.547539520022 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 289.8 283.868780488 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.33902439024 161% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 8.94146341463 112% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.4926829268 93% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.9931074661 43.030603864 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.3 112.824112599 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0 22.9334400587 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.4 5.23603664747 160% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 3.70975609756 189% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.266612427831 0.215688989381 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.107985817291 0.103423049105 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0754717184171 0.0843802449381 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.176093248665 0.15604864568 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0402529054432 0.0819641961636 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 13.2329268293 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 61.2550243902 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.3012195122 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 11.4140731707 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.54 8.06136585366 94% => OK
difficult_words: 38.0 40.7170731707 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.4329268293 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.9970731707 95% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.0658536585 72% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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