The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and Women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Essay topics:

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and Women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The given bar chart reveals situation of exercise, differing between men and women in Australia with various age groups.

Percentage of Australian female doing regular physical activity is higher than that of male, except the people from 15 to 24. it reaches 53.3 in 45 to 54, much more than the same age group of men. For male, it reaches highest(52.8) in 15 to 24 and others are all less.

For women, it has a trend of steady increase from 15 to 54, and drops gradually after 54. but for men, it declines from 15 to 44 especially diving drastically in the youth while it rises steadily after 45, starring the middle age.

Overall, the ratio of female who exercise regularly is higher than the ratio of male, especially from 25 to 64 keeping a concrete and obvious advantage. but the tendency of doing regular physical activity is distinct between them. When in middle age, women tend to do less and men on the contrary.

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, while, on the contrary

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.0 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 6.8 103% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 7.0 5.60731707317 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 31.0 33.7804878049 92% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 776.0 965.302439024 80% => OK
No of words: 165.0 196.424390244 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.70303030303 4.92477711251 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.58402463422 3.73543355544 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.44292798775 2.65546596893 92% => OK
Unique words: 100.0 106.607317073 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.606060606061 0.547539520022 111% => OK
syllable_count: 230.4 283.868780488 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 1.53170731707 261% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 4.33902439024 46% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.482926829268 621% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 3.36585365854 30% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.4926829268 80% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.6032503407 43.030603864 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.2222222222 112.824112599 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.3333333333 22.9334400587 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.44444444444 5.23603664747 66% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 1.69756097561 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 3.70975609756 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.09268292683 98% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.197806718396 0.215688989381 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0853543934398 0.103423049105 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0554254886436 0.0843802449381 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.124414831688 0.15604864568 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0473532315105 0.0819641961636 58% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 13.2329268293 75% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 61.2550243902 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.3012195122 77% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.98 11.4140731707 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.26 8.06136585366 102% => OK
difficult_words: 39.0 40.7170731707 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.4329268293 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.9970731707 84% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.0658536585 90% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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