The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Essay topics:

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

The bar chart demonstrates the proportion of male and female who had various age groups and did regular exercise in 2010.

From a simple recognition to the provided information, it is apparent women between 45 to 54 were the highest population who did exercises. However, men between 35 to 44 years old were the laziest group in exercising.

Juvenile with male sex between 15 to 24 years old exercised about 52.8 percent, 5 % more than the opposite sex at the same age. male physical activities reduced 10 percent as they got older up to 34 years old. while, women exercises rose to 48.9 percent and this raise continued to 52.5 percent as they got older up to 44 years old. Despite of men exercise that declined to 39.5 percent as they age became 44 years old.

From 45 to 54 years old men physical activity rose to 43.1%, though, women activity increased mere 1.3 percent in the same period. Furthermore, while female sex who were between 55 to 64 year-old increased their activity a negligible percent, men increased their activity about 2%.Also, it is noticeable that both male and female groups over 65 year-old did similar amount of exercises approximately 47% .

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Comments

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, however, so, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.0 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 6.8 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.15609756098 158% => OK
Pronoun: 10.0 5.60731707317 178% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 33.0 33.7804878049 98% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.97073170732 101% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 981.0 965.302439024 102% => OK
No of words: 201.0 196.424390244 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.88059701493 4.92477711251 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.76529505866 3.73543355544 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65289116657 2.65546596893 100% => OK
Unique words: 112.0 106.607317073 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.557213930348 0.547539520022 102% => OK
syllable_count: 297.0 283.868780488 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.33902439024 23% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.4926829268 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.8750811307 43.030603864 130% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.0 112.824112599 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.3333333333 22.9334400587 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.11111111111 5.23603664747 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 1.69756097561 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.09268292683 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.218661965585 0.215688989381 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.111333258403 0.103423049105 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0890382845865 0.0843802449381 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.174916400862 0.15604864568 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.100059949986 0.0819641961636 122% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 13.2329268293 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 61.2550243902 94% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.51609756098 172% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.3012195122 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.32 11.4140731707 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.87 8.06136585366 98% => OK
difficult_words: 40.0 40.7170731707 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.4329268293 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.9970731707 98% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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