The bar chart shows the percentage of unemployed graduates

Essay topics:

The bar chart shows the percentage of unemployed graduates

The given histogram shows the men and woman who had not a job during the year 2008 and 2009. The record was calibrated in a percentage by the month.

As seen clearly, men had a high unemployment rate in Oct 2009, whereas same year woman had a less than 15 percent unemployment. Moreover, in Jan 2009 and April 2009 men rate are identical to each other, same as in woman on July 08 and April 08. Furthermore in Jan 08 woman percentage was half of the man percent, which is about 10 percent.

Moving further, in April the man who had not a job is more as compared to a woman. Also, considering july 09 woman rate are near as touch to man-rate and which was about 15 percent. In addition, after the April 2009 woman rate was escalated significantly.

Overall, careful scrutiny of the bar chart reveals that man had a higher unemployment rate than a woman. Also, within upcoming months, man rate was clearly superseded the woman rate by great margins.

Votes
Average: 6.1 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 246, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Furthermore,
...me as in woman on July 08 and April 08. Furthermore in Jan 08 woman percentage was half of ...
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Line 5, column 60, Rule ID: COMP_THAN[1]
Message: Comparison requires 'than', not 'then' nor 'as'.
Suggestion: than
...April the man who had not a job is more as compared to a woman. Also, considering ...
^^
Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...seded the woman rate by great margins.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, if, moreover, so, whereas, as to, in addition

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 7.0 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 6.8 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.15609756098 158% => OK
Pronoun: 1.0 5.60731707317 18% => OK
Preposition: 22.0 33.7804878049 65% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.97073170732 101% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 788.0 965.302439024 82% => OK
No of words: 173.0 196.424390244 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.5549132948 4.92477711251 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.62669911048 3.73543355544 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58386028849 2.65546596893 97% => OK
Unique words: 91.0 106.607317073 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.526011560694 0.547539520022 96% => OK
syllable_count: 237.6 283.868780488 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.33902439024 46% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 3.36585365854 178% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 8.94146341463 112% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.4926829268 76% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 19.4846093109 43.030603864 45% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 78.8 112.824112599 70% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.3 22.9334400587 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.4 5.23603664747 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 3.70975609756 27% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.13902439024 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.09268292683 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0955440190319 0.215688989381 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0480026787969 0.103423049105 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0641277184073 0.0843802449381 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0710632770065 0.15604864568 46% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0495563708957 0.0819641961636 60% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.7 13.2329268293 66% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 61.2550243902 116% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.3012195122 74% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.81 11.4140731707 77% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.58 8.06136585366 94% => OK
difficult_words: 34.0 40.7170731707 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.4329268293 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.9970731707 80% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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