In an effort to improve our employees' productivity, we should implement electronic monitoring of employees' Internet use from their workstations. Employees who use the Internet from their workstations need to be identified and punished if we are to reduce the number of work hours spent on personal or recreational activities, such as shopping or playing games. By installing software to detect employees' Internet use on company computers, we can prevent employees from wasting time, foster a better work ethic at Climpson, and improve our overall profits."
The argument cites that the productivity at Climpson Industry's profit is a very low due to his
work-man does not work properly so, president installs the monitoring system than all work-man
do a better job and profit is increase. Stated in this way the argument fails to mention
several critical point basis on which it could be evaluated. The conclusion relies on the
argument for which, there is not better evidence. Hence, the conclusion can be unsubstantiated
and unsupported. However, careful scrutiny of the evidence reveals little credible support for
the author's conclusion.
First off all, The argument readily assumes that the employees productivity very low and stated
that productivity of employees are low due to recreational activities. This is merely an
argument without much solid ground. For example, If employees are done a proper job but some
machines in Climpson Industries not work properly than it is affect the production of the
company. Here the argument directly said that the production is directly dependent on employees
working hours. It is also possible that work-man do a best job and take a some time for
recreational activity but due to other factors factors productivity is low than work-mans are
not responsible for low productivity.
Second, The argument claims that the if we can use internet-monitoring system than workstation
easily find-out that person who do not work properly. This is again weak and
unsupported claim as a the argument does not demonstrate any correlation between computer
monitoring system and work-man efficiency to do a work. For Example, If company's president
install monitoring system, but where cameras are installed at this place all work-man do a best
jobs but other places does not work properly than it affect the productivity of the company.
Lastly, The argument cites that the President's monitoring system prevent employees from
wasting time and done a better job and profit overall increases. It is also weak assumption.
here the argument directly assumes that the profit is directly depends on the company's
productivity. For example it is also possible that Climpson company have a also child company
that also contributes the profit. So, here we can not said that the profit is increase if
president install monitoring system because it's other industry does not perform accordingly
than profits reduces. However, careful scrutiny of the evidence reveals little credible support
for the author's argument with respect to several critical point and raises several skeptical
questions. like monitoring system really affect the productivity ?, there is no other factor
that affects the profit ? Without the answer of the question the reader left with the
impression that the claims made by the author are more wishful rather than substantive.
In conclusion, The author's conclusion is unpersuasive as its stand. To bolster it further the
author must provide better concrete evidence. It considerably strengthened if the author
mentions all relevant facts. In order to asses the merit of certain situation it is essential
to have depth knowledge about contributing factors. As a result, the conclusion has a no legs
to stands.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 5, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...eveals little credible support for the authors conclusion. First off all, The argumen...
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Line 8, column 54, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'employees'' or 'employee's'?
Suggestion: employees'; employee's
..., The argument readily assumes that the employees productivity very low and stated that ...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 13, column 53, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[1]
Message: Use 'the' with the superlative.
Suggestion: the
...s. It is also possible that work-man do a best job and take a some time for recr...
^
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: factors
... recreational activity but due to other factors factors productivity is low than work-mans are ...
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Line 18, column 22, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'a' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: a; the
...is again weak and unsupported claim as a the argument does not demonstrate any corre...
^^^^^
Line 20, column 90, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[1]
Message: Use 'the' with the superlative.
Suggestion: the
...installed at this place all work-man do a best jobs but other places does not wo...
^
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Here
...increases. It is also weak assumption. here the argument directly assumes that the ...
^^^^
Line 25, column 74, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...lso possible that Climpson company have a also child company that also contribut...
^
Line 25, column 74, Rule ID: A_RB_NN[1]
Message: You used an adverb ('also') instead an adjective, or a noun ('child') instead of another adjective.
...lso possible that Climpson company have a also child company that also contributes the prof...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 26, column 55, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'say'
Suggestion: say
...ributes the profit. So, here we can not said that the profit is increase if preside...
^^^^
Line 29, column 9, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...eveals little credible support for the authors argument with respect to several critic...
^^^^^^^
Line 30, column 12, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Like
...nd raises several skeptical questions. like monitoring system really affect the pro...
^^^^
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...r than substantive. In conclusion, The authors conclusion is unpersuasive as its stand...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, first, hence, however, if, lastly, really, second, so, then, for example, in conclusion, as a result, with respect to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.6327345309 117% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.9520958084 39% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 13.6137724551 132% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 28.8173652695 111% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 55.5748502994 68% => OK
Nominalization: 23.0 16.3942115768 140% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2754.0 2260.96107784 122% => OK
No of words: 507.0 441.139720559 115% => OK
Chars per words: 5.43195266272 5.12650576532 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.74517233601 4.56307096286 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93549704501 2.78398813304 105% => OK
Unique words: 220.0 204.123752495 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.43392504931 0.468620217663 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 843.3 705.55239521 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.96107784431 161% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.22255489022 166% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 19.7664670659 132% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 54.2954333516 57.8364921388 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.923076923 119.503703932 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5 23.324526521 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.42307692308 5.70786347227 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 36.0 5.15768463074 698% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 13.0 5.25449101796 247% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.20758483034 158% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 6.88822355289 160% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0935963099022 0.218282227539 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0279956374745 0.0743258471296 38% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0423097169226 0.0701772020484 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0266849694224 0.128457276422 21% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0471865017319 0.0628817314937 75% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 14.3799401198 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 48.3550499002 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.21 12.5979740519 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.16 8.32208582834 98% => OK
difficult_words: 115.0 98.500998004 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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