The chart below gives information about trends in Internet use by females in the USA in two years.

Essay topics:

The chart below gives information about trends in Internet use by females in the USA in two years.

The illustration presents data of usage the world wide web by American women in different age groups from 12 to 65+ in two separating years of 2000 and 2001. All in all, it is clear that utilizing of interner had an overall downward tendency as females grew up and got older in both years.

Firstly, looking at the numbers of 2000, we can notice that the group, which was online mostly of the time, was the teenagers girls, who gained 90% of the population’s percentage. In comparison with 2001 year, where is the leader of using was 16-18 years old young women and what is interesting there was a peak on the whole downswing through the other age categories.

Secondly, just a fifth from the all proportion in 2000 and a third in 2001 the retired ladies of the 65+ years old went to the net and it was the smaller quantity compared with others.

To conclude, a fact that appearance in the internet of the oldest group increased on 10 per cent whitnes that the generally old women became more aware in modern trends.

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Average: 1.1 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 189, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[2]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: comparison,
...of the population's percentage. In comparison with 2001 year, where is the leader of ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, if, look, second, secondly, so, third, on the whole

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.0 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 6.8 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 3.15609756098 222% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 7.0 5.60731707317 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 31.0 33.7804878049 92% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.97073170732 101% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 852.0 965.302439024 88% => OK
No of words: 185.0 196.424390244 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.60540540541 4.92477711251 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.68801715136 3.73543355544 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56192267098 2.65546596893 96% => OK
Unique words: 119.0 106.607317073 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.643243243243 0.547539520022 117% => OK
syllable_count: 248.4 283.868780488 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.33902439024 46% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 8.94146341463 67% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 22.4926829268 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 19.995138298 43.030603864 46% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 142.0 112.824112599 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.8333333333 22.9334400587 134% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.1666666667 5.23603664747 213% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0581890435131 0.215688989381 27% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0281381081839 0.103423049105 27% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0244016216016 0.0843802449381 29% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0325820918449 0.15604864568 21% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0281507169048 0.0819641961636 34% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 13.2329268293 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 66.41 61.2550243902 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.3012195122 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.05 11.4140731707 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.54 8.06136585366 106% => OK
difficult_words: 40.0 40.7170731707 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.4329268293 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.9970731707 127% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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