The chart below shows participation in certain leisure activities by children in Australia.

Essay topics:

The chart below shows participation in certain leisure activities by children in Australia.

The bar chart gives the information about activities in which Australian youngsters aged from 5 to 14 years take part in their spare time.

Overall, it is clear from the graph that boys prefer more sports pursuits like bike riding, skateboarding, and rollerblading, while girls like such activity as art and craft more. However, absolutely all children admit in spite of their sex that they enjoy watching television or videos.

A closer examination of the figure reveals that one out of two young women prefer bike riding while the same figures for boys are 4 in 7.

There is a noticeable difference in art and craft activity between boys and girls, thus only 40% of interviewed boys who engaged in unlike above two third of surveyed girls who really interested in.

In comparison with 80% young men who like video games, this account only 60% of girls who also like it.

Votes
Average: 1.1 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 4, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[2]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: comparison,
...d girls who really interested in. In comparison with 80% young men who like video games...
^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, really, so, third, thus, while, in spite of

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 7.0 43% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 6.8 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 3.15609756098 253% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 9.0 5.60731707317 161% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 24.0 33.7804878049 71% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.97073170732 76% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 737.0 965.302439024 76% => OK
No of words: 151.0 196.424390244 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.88079470199 4.92477711251 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.50545371207 3.73543355544 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56883652651 2.65546596893 97% => OK
Unique words: 107.0 106.607317073 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.708609271523 0.547539520022 129% => OK
syllable_count: 223.2 283.868780488 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.33902439024 46% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 3.36585365854 30% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 8.94146341463 67% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 22.4926829268 111% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.8217684151 43.030603864 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.833333333 112.824112599 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.1666666667 22.9334400587 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.3333333333 5.23603664747 197% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 3.83414634146 130% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0688877925259 0.215688989381 32% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0337804247861 0.103423049105 33% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0297797803241 0.0843802449381 35% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0354492512462 0.15604864568 23% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0336449591825 0.0819641961636 41% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 13.2329268293 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 61.2550243902 89% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.51609756098 172% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.3012195122 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.32 11.4140731707 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.01 8.06136585366 99% => OK
difficult_words: 30.0 40.7170731707 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.4329268293 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.9970731707 109% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.0658536585 108% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.
More content wanted.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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