The charts below shows information about changes in average house prices in five different cities between 1990 and 2002 compared with the average house prices in 1989.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart illustrates, compared with the average prices to buy a house in 1989, the price changes of houses on the average in five major cities during two measured periods (1990-1995 and 1996-2002). Overall, besides Frankfurt, the house prices in other cities all experienced an upward trend throughout the surveyed period.
First of all, the number of cities that had a higher average housing price than that in 1989 grew from 2 to 4 during the 12 years. To be more specific, the most striking change can be viewed in London’s house price as it soared from 17% lower than the figure in reference year to 11% higher than that in 1989. The house price change in New York took the second place, which dramatically rose its percentage from 95% to 105% when compared with the basic statistic in 1989.
As for Madrid and Tokyo, their prices of house also went up but in a less significant way, with the price in Madrid rose 3% (from 101% to 104%) and Tokyo increased 2% (from 93% to 95%) respectively. By contrast, with the only declined ratio, the housing price in Frankfurt slightly dropped 1% (from 102% to 101%) during the surveyed time.
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The bar chart illustrates, compared with the average prices to buy a house in 1989, the price changes of houses on the average in five major cities
description: can you rewrite this sentence?
the number of cities that had a higher average housing price than that in 1989 grew from 2 to 4 during the 12 years
description: it is confusing to understand this sentence.
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flaws:
we should not make math in IELTS essays, like:
(from 101% to 104%)
(from 93% to 95%)
(from 102% to 101%)
whatever we see is what we should write down. like: -10, -5, 0, 5, 10, 12, 15
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 5.5 out of 9
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 2 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 7 10
No. of Words: 202 200
No. of Characters: 898 1000
No. of Different Words: 117 100
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.77 4.0
Average Word Length: 4.446 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.365 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 58 60
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 35 50
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 25 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 14 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 28.857 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.468 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.571 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.485 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.706 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.146 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 3 4
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, if, second, so, as for, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 2.0 7.0 29% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 6.8 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.15609756098 158% => OK
Pronoun: 6.0 5.60731707317 107% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 33.7804878049 124% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 940.0 965.302439024 97% => OK
No of words: 202.0 196.424390244 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.65346534653 4.92477711251 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.76996954942 3.73543355544 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45696216337 2.65546596893 93% => OK
Unique words: 120.0 106.607317073 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.594059405941 0.547539520022 108% => OK
syllable_count: 266.4 283.868780488 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.33902439024 161% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 3.36585365854 149% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 22.4926829268 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 29.2756080123 43.030603864 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.285714286 112.824112599 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.8571428571 22.9334400587 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.0 5.23603664747 172% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 0.0 1.69756097561 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.09268292683 98% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.354727252163 0.215688989381 164% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.182052350681 0.103423049105 176% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.115461703281 0.0843802449381 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.257246064031 0.15604864568 165% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.105113617387 0.0819641961636 128% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 13.2329268293 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 68.44 61.2550243902 112% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.3012195122 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.28 11.4140731707 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.15 8.06136585366 101% => OK
difficult_words: 40.0 40.7170731707 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.4329268293 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.9970731707 120% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.0658536585 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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