The charts show what the Australian school leavers did immediately after leaving secondary school. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Essay topics:

The charts show what the Australian school leavers did immediately after leaving secondary school. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The three pie charts illustrate information about the percentage of secondary graduates in term of unemployment, employed and further education in Australia over the course of 20 years starting in 1980.

Overall, the figure of unemployed people remained stable and accounted for a minority in total. While the school leavers tended to start a job, the opposite trend can be seen in the proportion of people who chose to attend school for further education.

In details, in 1980, the people going on studying made up the highest percentage at exactly one-twice of the total. Then, this figure declined gradually by 12% and nearly unchanged after 10 years. There was a minimal fluctuation in the percentage of unemployment, which started at 10%, increased slightly by 2% in 1990 and dropped to 8% at the end.

More significantly, the period witnessed a constant growth in the rate of school leavers who choose to go for a work from the percentage of 40 in 1980 and reached the peak at 55% in 2000.

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 8, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... and reached the peak at 55% in 2000.
^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, second, then, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 2.0 7.0 29% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 6.8 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 1.0 5.60731707317 18% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 33.7804878049 112% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 3.97073170732 176% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 839.0 965.302439024 87% => OK
No of words: 170.0 196.424390244 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.93529411765 4.92477711251 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.61087313685 3.73543355544 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8436841935 2.65546596893 107% => OK
Unique words: 106.0 106.607317073 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.623529411765 0.547539520022 114% => OK
syllable_count: 244.8 283.868780488 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.33902439024 115% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 22.4926829268 107% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.5522487955 43.030603864 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.857142857 112.824112599 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.2857142857 22.9334400587 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.28571428571 5.23603664747 63% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.13902439024 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.103664262915 0.215688989381 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0425498020923 0.103423049105 41% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0442626521219 0.0843802449381 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0628115563734 0.15604864568 40% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0292736175276 0.0819641961636 36% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 13.2329268293 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 64.04 61.2550243902 105% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.3012195122 100% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.67 11.4140731707 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.64 8.06136585366 107% => OK
difficult_words: 41.0 40.7170731707 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.9970731707 105% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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