The diagrams below show the stages and equipment used in the cement-making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where releva

The first flow diagram illustrates the information about the production of cement, and second diagram reveals about the concrete production by using concrete and materials. It is clear and coherent representation.

It can be seen that, the first diagram shows the cement production. In this process, two types of materials firstly crushed: limestone and clay. After that, materials turned into the powdered form with the help of crusher. Nextly, the powder is put into the mixer and then it reached in the rotating heater from where the powder become heated and then, the last step is to grind the powder so to form the cement with the help of grinder. Once this process has finished, the cement is packed into the bags.

The diagram highlights the information about the complete production of concrete by using four distinct materials: cement, water, sand and gravel. The first step is to mix the materials into big concrete mixer and then this mixer started rotating clockwise in order to form the concrete. Here, the process of producing concrete has been finished.

Overall, it is evident that cement production go through various steps and it requires advanced machinery to form the cement whereas, the process of concrete production is very simple because there is no usage of machinery.

Votes
Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 88, Rule ID: NEEDS_FIXED[1]
Message: "requires advanced" is only accepted in certain dialects. For something more widely acceptable, try 'advancing' or 'to be advanced'.
Suggestion: advancing; to be advanced
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, second, so, then, whereas

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 7.0 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 6.8 132% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 11.0 5.60731707317 196% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 30.0 33.7804878049 89% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 3.97073170732 227% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1090.0 965.302439024 113% => OK
No of words: 213.0 196.424390244 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.11737089202 4.92477711251 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.82027741392 3.73543355544 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57853779285 2.65546596893 97% => OK
Unique words: 108.0 106.607317073 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.507042253521 0.547539520022 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 324.9 283.868780488 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => OK
Article: 9.0 4.33902439024 207% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 8.94146341463 123% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.4926829268 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 62.3236023105 43.030603864 145% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.0909090909 112.824112599 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3636363636 22.9334400587 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.72727272727 5.23603664747 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 1.13902439024 263% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.09268292683 122% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.215641439368 0.215688989381 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0877565832116 0.103423049105 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0685775390468 0.0843802449381 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.143877567012 0.15604864568 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0346148571655 0.0819641961636 42% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 13.2329268293 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 61.2550243902 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.3012195122 92% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 11.4140731707 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.36 8.06136585366 104% => OK
difficult_words: 51.0 40.7170731707 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.4329268293 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.9970731707 87% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.0658536585 90% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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