The diagrams below show the stages and equipment used in the cement-making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevan

Essay topics:

The diagrams below show the stages and equipment used in the cement-making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The given diagram shows the process of cement production and then how this cement is used for concrete production. As is observed from the graph, cement production involves some complex processes and concrete production is done using the water, cement and sand in a concrete mixer.

The first diagram depicts that, to produce cement first the limestone and clay are crushed and the produced powder from this is passed through a mixer. The power is then passed via a rotating heater where heat is supplied constantly and this process creates the raw cement materials which is passed on a grinder machine to finally produce the cement. The cement is then packed and marketed for sell.

The second diagram presents how the concrete is produced for housing and building work. In the first stage, 15% cement, 10% water, 25% sand and 50% small stones are mixed in a concrete mixer machine and the machine rotates fast to have the ingredients mixed together to create the concrete.

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 352, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... machine to finally produce the cement. The cement is then packed and marketed for ...
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Line 3, column 391, Rule ID: FOR_SELL[1]
Message: Did you mean 'for sale'?
Suggestion: for sale
... The cement is then packed and marketed for sell. The second diagram presents how the...
^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...s then packed and marketed for sell. The second diagram presents how the concret...
^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, second, so, then

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 7.0 157% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 6.8 147% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 4.0 5.60731707317 71% => OK
Preposition: 13.0 33.7804878049 38% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 4.0 3.97073170732 101% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 816.0 965.302439024 85% => OK
No of words: 165.0 196.424390244 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.94545454545 4.92477711251 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.58402463422 3.73543355544 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.33970793936 2.65546596893 88% => OK
Unique words: 87.0 106.607317073 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.527272727273 0.547539520022 96% => OK
syllable_count: 242.1 283.868780488 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.33902439024 115% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 22.4926829268 102% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.3532700832 43.030603864 124% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.571428571 112.824112599 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5714285714 22.9334400587 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.57142857143 5.23603664747 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.09268292683 98% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.325321443285 0.215688989381 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.172770751335 0.103423049105 167% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0905986441118 0.0843802449381 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.222376575574 0.15604864568 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0709286104057 0.0819641961636 87% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 13.2329268293 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 61.2550243902 92% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.3012195122 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.73 11.4140731707 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.32 8.06136585366 103% => OK
difficult_words: 37.0 40.7170731707 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 11.4329268293 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.9970731707 102% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.0658536585 108% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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