The graph below give information about computer ownership as a percentage of the population between 2002 and 2010, and by level of education for the years 2002 and 2010.

Essay topics:

The graph below give information about computer ownership as a percentage of the population between 2002 and 2010, and by level of education for the years 2002 and 2010.

The bar graphs present data about computer by people in a given population and with classification in accordance to their educational level for 2002 and 2010. Figures are displayed in a percentage scale.

Overall, computer ownership outlined a steady increased throughout the nine-year period. Moreover, higher percentage of population owned computer in 2010 than in 2002 regardless of the level of education attained.

In the year of 2002, the proportion of population owning a computer was at over 50% which eventually reached 60% after two years. A stable rise in the acquisition of computer continued for the following years that by 2008, ownership rate went up to approximately 70% with a significant 10% rise since 2004. By the end of the indicated time period, a further five percent increase caused a peak to roughly 75% in terms of computer ownership.

On the other hand, ownership of computer was classified according to educational attainment in 2002 and 2010. During the former year, the percentage of owners who completed high school was about 30% which was relatively double the value of those without high school diploma. People with uncompleted college program accounted more than 50% of computer owners and proportion significantly climbed as the educational status became higher,making postgraduates the category with largest number of people having computer. Similarly, the latter year 2010 showed and upward trend with significant rate of over 40% accounting for people with lowest educational level. The value constantly elevated; secondary school graduates had over 60% and it rocketed by over 20% increase for people with incomplete college degree, Bachelor's degree holders and postgraduates, having over 80% respectively.

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Average: 8.4 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, moreover, second, similarly, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.0 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 6.8 103% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 4.0 5.60731707317 71% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 33.7804878049 157% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 3.97073170732 252% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1485.0 965.302439024 154% => OK
No of words: 270.0 196.424390244 137% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.5 4.92477711251 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.05360046442 3.73543355544 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01045503308 2.65546596893 113% => OK
Unique words: 155.0 106.607317073 145% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.574074074074 0.547539520022 105% => OK
syllable_count: 450.0 283.868780488 159% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.45097560976 117% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.33902439024 161% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 8.94146341463 134% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.4926829268 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.8946582565 43.030603864 121% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.75 112.824112599 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5 22.9334400587 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.16666666667 5.23603664747 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 1.69756097561 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 3.70975609756 216% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.372697059479 0.215688989381 173% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.153397698439 0.103423049105 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.125647008926 0.0843802449381 149% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.28207639728 0.15604864568 181% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0964389557926 0.0819641961636 118% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 13.2329268293 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 61.2550243902 66% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.51609756098 172% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 10.3012195122 127% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.92 11.4140731707 131% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.17 8.06136585366 114% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 40.7170731707 187% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.4329268293 74% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.9970731707 98% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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