The graph below shows the demand for electricity in England during typical days in winter and summer. The pie chart shows how electricity is used in an average English home.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The total of electricity units used by People in the UK during winter and summer is depicted in the line chart, while the variety of the used electricity in an average British house is witnessed in the Pie Chart. It can clearly be seen that winter session made up a steep rise in the using of electricity, and the highest using for heating rooms and water.
To begin with, People used the huge electricity in the winter session, reaching a peak at just above 45.000 units in the total of 21 hours. Nevertheless, in the last Period, 24 hours, it took the same as in the beginning of the given frame, experiencing about 35,000 units, with the exception of a slight fall between 5 to 9 hours. On the other hand, it needed a half as much the consumption of electricity in the summer as those in the winter.
Besides, most people in the UK utilized electricity for heating rooms and water, accounting for 52.5%. Moreover, ovens, kettles, washing machines took a part of 17.5%. Ultimately, the rest of parts experienced a fairly similar percentage, at 15% respectively.
To conclude, people in the UK utilized many units of electricity in the winter session, and it was daily used for heating rooms and water in the much content.
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Essay evaluation report
flaws:
Need more content for the line chart.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 7.0 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 9 10
No. of Words: 217 200
No. of Characters: 973 1000
No. of Different Words: 114 100
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.838 4.0
Average Word Length: 4.484 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.58 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 60 60
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 42 50
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 25 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 18 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.111 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.243 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.667 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.473 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.691 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.085 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 4
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 275, Rule ID: WITH_THE_EXCEPTION_OF[1]
Message: Use simply 'except' or 'except for'
Suggestion: except; except for
...frame, experiencing about 35,000 units, with the exception of a slight fall between 5 to 9 hours. On ...
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Line 7, column 39, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... To conclude, people in the UK utilized many units of electricity in the winter ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, moreover, nevertheless, while, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.0 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.15609756098 32% => OK
Pronoun: 6.0 5.60731707317 107% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 33.7804878049 115% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalization wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1016.0 965.302439024 105% => OK
No of words: 217.0 196.424390244 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.68202764977 4.92477711251 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.8380880478 3.73543355544 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70241825222 2.65546596893 102% => OK
Unique words: 118.0 106.607317073 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.543778801843 0.547539520022 99% => OK
syllable_count: 315.9 283.868780488 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Interrogative: 0.0 0.114634146341 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.33902439024 46% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.482926829268 414% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 3.36585365854 178% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 22.4926829268 107% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.1116584532 43.030603864 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.888888889 112.824112599 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.1111111111 22.9334400587 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 5.23603664747 153% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.09268292683 122% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.214116556382 0.215688989381 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.090216665078 0.103423049105 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0879567553321 0.0843802449381 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.134618740751 0.15604864568 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0786025363342 0.0819641961636 96% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 13.2329268293 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 61.2550243902 91% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.3012195122 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.16 11.4140731707 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.88 8.06136585366 98% => OK
difficult_words: 42.0 40.7170731707 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.4329268293 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.9970731707 105% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.0658536585 108% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9 //this essay topic is for IELTS task I, not task II. we have edited the score
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